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replying on The way I know it's love by baby_d
10 Nov 2003, 7:02 AM
Give us a effing break will ya Dark_Angel - so what if the piece reeks of fraudulence & cliche. But its her piece & other can appreciate it if they want.But in truch i'll puck before i swallow this shit abt luv and its a 01 fr ideas but the + i'll add just fr the composition n nothingmore:o)
Id call it a cowards act...But who cares...Luv the piece & a 10 wud glow fr this fr sure:o)
Is this luv or begging just dont know, most of all this feels wrong,but bub ill say its worth a 4 & no more:o(
The darn father..seen:o)
Started out great but it somehow became stale - wonder how:o(
the 'e' kinda makes it odd... thats what i feel so thats how i kept it:o)
Call me wierd. I like it as is. It makes sense to me. It's just a request from a reader to a poet for some things. It works. But I don't like (dribble) . trickle , maybe. Dribble makes me think of infirm people.
Your bickering has given me a heavy headache, tsk tsk seems 2 much sparetime at ya hands:o)
Hope such fell ideas never occure 2 me again:o)
Hmm. Yes. Confused is.
sorry. (it's what one gets at a poem a day)
mind time doubt rhyme, drought dribble. :)
I knew (knew?) that it was bad, but y'all are confusing me like no other. picture give rhyme dribble!
I have become convinced that the sole purpose of this poem is to deliberately confuse the reader so greatly that when he finally deciphers the claptrap within, he confuses his enormous relief that the ordeal is over with a sense of joy and beauty-appreciation. 10!!!1
Liar. You'll never get into Jesu Park if you don't have the strength - yes that's right THE STRENGTH - to tell the truth. No doubt you'll claim the poeme genuinely was never in question, but that would only be another lie. Another example of your weakness. You are weak. Beak.
I've read color printed hand folded scientology brochures with more promise.
What do you get when you cross polar bears with a famous soft drink? Bipolar autistic brats with bad teeth and poor taste in advertising naturally.
Please do, but not in front of me. I'm not wearing shoes.
Thank god for the last two sentences becauses I almost wretched from Ikea poetry overload.
good thing mars isnt retro anymore :D
That's the slut in you going for seconds.