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on First Time In A Long Time by EAger to Offend
24 Oct 2003, 2:17 PM
You play the guitar? You must be very creative.
My favorite line was "lobe".
It chills the warm cockles of my forgotten admonition to stay out of the water. Good vote though.
Dr. Fuhrmenbresten says, "If you've seen one...you've likely seen 'em both." Not sure the reference to pubic hair fits in the grand scheme of breasts, but, I like the last two lines. 9
Nice idea, you can hear the pensive voice in the last three words
nicely done
Yeah, face cancer will do that.
It's very clear, yet vague enough to keep me meditating upon the metaphor. The senile woman version sounds like it would be a little more story-like, but I'd like to read it none the less.
I agree, the last line is really what makes it.
I feel your pain. And the Coleridge reference is cute.
Oh my, the locations of instances of 'rain' have similar properties to the locations of actual raindrops. INCREDIBLE!
poemranker support : 9
You're a leader richard
I can appreciate a sober thought expressed clearly and simply. Agree with Bill though, the elipse is pointless.
WOW!!!!!11
MEDIOCRITY CODE
01F49D04
http://www.mycgiserver.com/~prawne/code.
Descriptive and fairly technical, yet somehow bland. Like a Rococo painting.
This begs for repeated reads, and gets better with each one.
You forgot "Heil".