horus8
on Suburban Horror by phbiscuit
15 Aug 2003, 12:51 AM
The end was a toss, and you need an i in patiently, otherwise some very good parts. 7.
Good, but it could use an edit. 8.
Dark Angle
on A parking lot, a smoke, and the pleasure of being alone by thepinkbunnyofdoom
15 Aug 2003, 12:23 AM
nice little poem ya got here,
durkl, lovely little poem here, didnt see it comming, well until it plainly came that is, then i saw it.
haha, yep, remember zima, how bout that new bicardi silver? but id take good old fashion wild berry wine coolers any day! now thats some man on man beer!
Ohhhh Yeah! That's what I'm talkin' bout. Rather, what you're talking about that resonates superbly. Better than a good idea. It's a good idea well presented. 10
L7's a bit long i believe . 9.
Bitchin' dude. 9, but only because it was not a sonnet.
Nylon instruments of death. 10!
Zuper.
Wickedly obtrusive.
Yep. 0
L2 has nine beats instead of 10.
Weird, if you ask me.
well done. great emotionn.
Have you seen that movie the Goonies? 10!
No, no, no and nope, but you were very very close.
metal? medal? works both ways.. haha.. 10
YES! YES! AND I ESPECIALLY LIKE HOW I RHYMED 'ABOUT' WITH... 'ABOUT'. I thought that was just damn genius.
Hot hot heat.