Mr Pig
on Everything Counts by Lord Ganus
11 Apr 2003, 8:27 AM
Golly ! this was enjoyable and humourous because contracts are the epitomy of evil. In Eritrea one man had his hand severed for breach of a promise made to his son, his son severed his fathers hand with such ferocity it split the scabbard.
Bravo 8
Dear Mr In-transit.
A formal request for you to please offer any thoughts on my recent posting.
Kind Regards
Laurence. aka Mr Pig
How does one pray with all there might? I am interested because surely one would injure ones self.
I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem.
Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.
February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7
I see the tenderness of age in your work. As you become more life experienced your writing will evolve as it is with your work at present, the naivity somewhat burdens any serious writing.
We've all been there though so keep your pecker up. 5
I would be grateful if you would look at mine and offer me your views,
Thank you.
A good try at the suicide genre but the repetition and use of cliches adds nothing to our imagination as its a tell all poem, however I bequeath thee a 6.
This is supposed to be a poem........hahahaha
Oh yeah as if they care what u think........hahahaha
thats funny coming from a shithead like u......hahaha
What the fuck is this fascination with vampires?.......i say kill em wherever u find any bloodsucking lowlifes
No i made a mistake by bothering to notice shiity poetry like the above
Only if you change it from Vilanelle. Cause Maria throughs The ryhme off. But for you go ahead.
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Sodomy eh?.......its k child abuse can b cured.....provided u don't get urself blown up first.......hahaha
why don't u hang urself.........might b something u do right
I found this to be witty because, unlike your others,this one was quite funny. Maybe its because it is the name works so well, or maybe its just the image of someone drunk falling on their bum. Either way its much more humorish and has an appeal that the other pieces you wrote. Anyway there is clear mental image and a sense of FUN in its inmature nature. Your others lack in that fold.Therefore I deem this piece worthy of reading unlike the others.
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Very concealed points, please enlighten me more I almost enjoyed it 6
sorry to hear of your porking problem.
what? lol i dunnow ot ur talking about but yep okay.
I think you're worst than fucking chopsticks. Have a nice day :)