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on The dance as old as time by wEdible Underpantsw
28 Mar 2003, 6:34 AM
so bad it's good.
http://www.likesbooks.com/parody.html
This is the best poem on this site. All the rest are crap including my own, but this actually made me chortle out loud, for this sah I commend you.
However having just read katies dross poetry I have to admit I prefer the idea of breaching her maidenhead.
I agree with Stephen...filth
Truly great
Masterful
Filth.
In fact I will go further than that, this poem is a bag of horseshite which I think Justin Timberlake would think about twice before singing.
cack.
Waiting to die
"Waiting to die"
There is some promise here. Think carefully.
Curled like an autumn leaf
Waiting to die
is a brilliant line. I think I steal it from you, after all, I made it work.
Get rid of closed.
Get rid of in ( i will walk your trail)
"kicking dust up as I go"
What the fuck, this needs a deep cleaning, and I'm not giving anything away for free (anymore).
You know what your talking about but you have no skills.
Yo se que eres un poeta, sin argumento. Hay varias palabras y frases que matan cualquier duda de tu dolce dominio del lenguaje.
Gracias por haber lo puesto tan crudo. En este momento es solo lo crudo que puedo entender. Es tan dificil expresar sentimientos nuevos. somos una rasa nueva, moderna. El teror de la guerra, para nosotros, lla no es algo fisico. Lo vivimos emocionalmente, espiritualmente. Cada muerte es una pena y un dolor.
Esta poesia no esta completamente formada, pero lla veo la belleza de su rostro.
yeah, that's a great image. but this one is so false, untrue, unknowing that it kills it, dead:
I lie nestled in wait
Curled like an autumn leaf
Waiting for life.
AUTUMN LEAVES ARE d-e-d DEAD!!!
buds lie culred and waiting, at the tips of the branches. unless you are waiting for the life of the flames--a conflagration to end all conflagrations.
you are so cute when you are stoned, you know that???
find something i can have with a long flat red, and we're talking, poncho.
Tick Tock Tick Tock, The Ever Running Clock
At the chime It will be 7 o'clock
eh? Why not -6-
Ewww... I never I should have quit reading after the sex but no I thought there will be more sex and then I was like sweet a blow job but then Curiousity got the best of me Anal Ewww... this would be a 60 rounded down to 10 cause there is nothing higher than a 10 but you just lost 51 points for anal enjoy your 9
I must say I thought that was going to be good just from your first line but nope. Not really sure what went wrong but it ended up a trainwreck. -3-
muh....i don't like the end. its pretty vague but not in a good way and not final or strong at all. some excellant description though. i was glad it wasn't longer, it would've ruined the charm.
hhmmmm. simple. i like it.