i think i like this one the most of all of yours i've read so far. it has such a sway to it, draws one in...

I like "silver assassin", but the rest ... seems almost there. just not quite.

universal isn't it?

you whizzed on your legs?

I think I would have liked hammock better (netted swing is poetic, but I didn't get it). this is simple and short, densely packed with common images, but... the collage is almost poignant. leans towards trite. maybe just the "ing ing ing".

mad applause for the 5th line

must you mix the doves with Saturn? you'll rupture the mammal space continueum and force darwin to dry hump kubric in a swimming pool full of nestle's strawberry milk... what? lol.

ehhh i like the hammock better

mmm dreamy.. i like it

I love your choice of words..."muted whispers" I really like this poem

Its never your fault...always theirs..just remember that

You will become the ocean....

where did he go?

i like your name tho by the way

this is terrible. let me give you a piece of advice my english teacher always told me: show me, don't tell me.

i would rather take a cheese grater to my face than read this

how quaint. i give it an 8

Who are you really?