No, do you ?

Cheers bud. It takes an intellect to recognise an intellect and I'm beggining to have grudging repsect for you. The insufferable arrogance of human beings to think that Nature was made solely for their benefit, as if it was conceivable that the sun had been set afire merely to ripen men's apples and head their cabbages. What say you Cyrano ?

And it does not take guts to make a comment, especially on bad poetry. I do it quite often. Do you really find it courageous to post all the comments you've made?

Do you know what pretentious means? I am not pretending and you may personally welcome anything you like, that's your right as it is mine to stay here and bring you some much needed guidance. This poem is beyond your intellect. The register of the poem is antagonistic, it is meant to be, it is aimed at an audience of intelligence and perception. It is meant to be paradoxical in that the anti-heroine longs for oblivion rather than the stasis and security of being protected against the harshness of life, and yet ultimately realises that in her naivety she has brought this all on herself. Commas, I spit in the face of convention, when was the last time you did ?

My God -- you actually have the gall to excuse an idiotic number of commas making nonsense of what you're saying (which is nonsense anyhow) by saying you can do what you want with your own poem, and then go post those comments of yours? That must take the cake. You're even more of an arrogant bastard than I am. I'm almost impressed.

Its my poem I'll put commas where I want to, thanks for having the guts to make a comment

Thanks. I am glad I have at least some potential. Mum and pop think so. The sun thing is a play on John Donne's "The Sun Rising". It is an allegory. Does that make sense? Poets use that sort of thing sometimes, you know, to give the poem a little something more. And I suppose I use "and" as a stylistic choice. It is definitely a comtemporary American sort of thing. I use it much the same way you use too many commas, except for different reasons. I want to keep things moving. You automatically have the line break pause; well at times, I want to run right through it. Like a red light. Take the challenge see if something its me.