Re: a comment on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson	Alizarin_Crimson 24.250.22.18	3-May-05/2:29 PM
I thought of a "Dosh" as being thicker than a dash...its creamier, kind of like something between a slosh and a dash. I dunno. Painters will understand :)
Re: Ooooo..that smell by windyone	unknown^user 128.196.6.126	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Is this an addition to the Lynyrd Skynyrd song?
Re: a comment on chris (not finished yet) by eliznhaz	eliznhaz 65.246.232.101	3-May-05/2:29 PM
yes the first line is a typo I know there is alot of this poem that needs to be fix and it needs to be straightend out theres alot missing that I'd like to add but i can't seem to find the words
Re: chris (not finished yet) by eliznhaz	unknown^user 128.196.6.126	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Is "without out" in the first line a typo? You may want to considering adding line breaks, especially where things rhyme like at "me" and at "day." There needs to be some sort of punctuation between "around you" and "I got out."
Re: Waffleman by Stephen Robins	Alizarin_Crimson 24.250.22.18	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Again, I absolutely despise your work. And I know you'll take that as a compliment.
Re: Just Another Poem by Damien	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.87.95	3-May-05/2:29 PM
I'm a big fan of Math and Logic. However this is good stuff. -8- <3 Jason
Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee	Dovina 17.255.240.6	3-May-05/2:29 PM
A tale well told, but I always look for the twist, the irony, the lesson, or the laugh. Still looking.
Re: Ignorant Children by Stacy Stewart	Dovina 17.255.240.6	3-May-05/2:29 PM
An essay made to look like a poem. A prose poem at best.
Re: Actor by horus8	Alizarin_Crimson 24.250.22.18	3-May-05/2:29 PM
By the end, I feel as though we've lost the original point. what is "fuck, a beard and a bow?" Is that the voice of the child, realizing the difficulty of pulling that off? And the story about the man...I guess I din't read that book...
Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.87.95	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Politics + Your Head = Gold I assume this is about some British Election coming up?
Re: Cast a shadow. by darby pyn	fevriere 62.254.128.7	3-May-05/2:29 PM
No complaints. Hit between eyes and loss of all critical function. Thus this poem gets love.
Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.87.95	3-May-05/2:29 PM
The first verse I think could use a little more effort put into the meter. Everything else seems to flow naturally, written to be read out loud. Interesting Story telling. -9- <3 Jason
Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	fevriere 62.254.128.7	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Yeah. Not at all bad for a topical verse.
Re: a comment on Waffleman by Stephen Robins	zodiac 212.118.19.183	3-May-05/2:29 PM
I think it's a real song.
Re: a comment on Waffleman by Stephen Robins	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-May-05/2:29 PM
It is a real song in so far as it is written lyrics which accompany an offbeat reggae tune. It is about a friend of mine who pursued a different, less successful, career path than me. He became a surf bum/waffleman who is living the dream by spending the entirety of his life making waffles for tourists in Devon. And he makes damn bad waffles.
Re: a comment on Waffleman by Stephen Robins	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Silly cunt.
Re: PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Vote for blonde, bubbly right winger? Or a fat lesbian minger? It's Mel for me, For she's the Tory, To make Peter Snow a swinger. Now that fat truck of a mess from labour! Why, only a body transplant could save her, The size of her belly, And her cunt's like a welly, Filled with communist jelly. The lib dem is as plain as a door, Without paint or other decor, Tax and spend is the vow, Of this skinny frau, She is easy to abhor.
Re: a way to pass time by unknown^user	Dovina 17.255.240.6	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Not enough poetic character. Call it an esay.
Re: Actor by horus8	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	3-May-05/2:29 PM
Sorry we couldn't meet fer a minute while I was out there. Bidness is bidness, right?
Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	3-May-05/2:29 PM
The annual Oshkosh fly-in? Just wondering.