Re: The temple of Dissaray by DeadtotheWorld	[mojo] 80.58.44.109	21-Apr-05/12:01 AM
I'm always wary of any poem with "pain" "misery" "torture" and "despair" on ONE line! Seems more than a little angst(y). And "Theirs" should be "There's".
Re: Layne Staley's Sunglasses by Jeremi B. Handrinos	[mojo] 80.58.44.109	20-Apr-05/11:59 PM
Overly bleak. Maybe i just prefer life AFFIRMING haiku?
Re: a comment on Gaping Hole by sonawrote	sonawrote 64.12.116.138	20-Apr-05/7:27 PM
A comedian you are not... though you should change your handle to TOAD as without ever seeing your face your ugliness shows quite well
Re: A new leaf by Damien	sonawrote 64.12.116.67	20-Apr-05/7:20 PM
keep going Damien.....chin up chin up,no one ever got to their destination looking at their feet!
Re: Gaping Hole by sonawrote	sonawrote 64.12.116.67	20-Apr-05/7:17 PM
I edited the title since some of the MORONS that read here are trying to be comedians.....and doing a pathetic job at it
Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	edpeterson 68.79.19.7	20-Apr-05/4:41 PM
This is the best poem I have ever read. -0-
Re: Utensils of creation by Damien	edpeterson 68.79.19.7	20-Apr-05/4:36 PM
Laughing, hard.
Re: Staying Alive by darylchew	Dovina 204.250.12.246	20-Apr-05/3:57 PM
Some grammar problems. Suicide poems usually don't work.
Re: A new leaf by Damien	Dovina 204.250.12.246	20-Apr-05/3:53 PM
"their" in Line 6. "boundless" in Line 13 "whoever" in Line 16 I hope you do not mean that you hope this is not understandable. If you do mean that, why did you write it? The first two verses make sense to me, the last two - I don't know.
Re: tanka (3) by shadows	Dovina 204.250.12.246	20-Apr-05/3:45 PM
Yes, you are.
Re: Lonely Soul by faded_twilight	forsaken 158.136.148.162	20-Apr-05/2:18 PM
I like this poem as I did your Hurting Heart one. I wish you had more on here, since I enjoy these more then any others. There's something about poems about being alone that always catch my eye. Do you have more on a different site?
Re: Hamlet's Horniness by Sashaclese	Alizarin_Crimson 198.7.247.203	20-Apr-05/12:16 PM
no
Re: The Little Merman by avery	Alizarin_Crimson 198.7.247.203	20-Apr-05/12:14 PM
I really, really like this poem, although I can definitely see that you have too good of a vocabulary to be stuck with things like "Abyss" and the picture-kissed her part.
Re: The Lion and the worm. by <{Baba^Yaga}>	Tintagiles 142.166.250.20	20-Apr-05/10:16 AM
Are those actually line breaks, or is this a prose poem? One can't quite tell.
Re: A new leaf by Damien	Tintagiles 142.166.250.20	20-Apr-05/10:14 AM
By tower in Line 4, do you mean 'clap in chains in the tower'? And at the start of the last stanza, do you mean boundless or are we talking about some bounder who'S rather lazy? Just wondering.
Re: Jared Leto & Apocalyptic poetry. by Shardik	Tintagiles 142.166.250.20	20-Apr-05/10:11 AM
You forget that it's all right to loot the world because Jesus is coming and the world will end soon, and he's given us this wonderfully rich world, and wouldn't it be a shame, and possibly an insult, if we didn't use it all up first? He'll think we didn't like his present. As polemic it's amusing, as poetry rather less so.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	20-Apr-05/9:27 AM
I think the cardinals chose an elderly to give themselves a better chance of being elected pope. Many of them will still be around when Ratzinger goes tits up.
Re: Sudden Change by Dovina	Caducus 172.215.203.20	20-Apr-05/8:30 AM
Weird how the opening line seemed long but was ironed out by fiorst line of second stanza. The last line is sheer brilliance hope they interpret it as i did (wrong or not).
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	Caducus 172.215.203.20	20-Apr-05/8:28 AM
drop the - 'on what we' that'll help for starters
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	Caducus 172.215.203.20	20-Apr-05/8:28 AM
Would slap me sideways with a briefer last line.