I do appreciate the intended kindness extended toward me in this time of trouble. To be comforted to this degree of sweetness during a supposed affliction with Creutzfeldt-Jakob disease (CJD), a rare and fatal neurodegenerative disorder of unknown cause, carries a marked degree of gratification. The MOOOOOOOO at the end adds an affectionate touch, as if written by a bull being sucked by a deviant calf. I know where your heart is, so perhaps a more tender metaphor.

Regards, Dovina

I hate the restrictions of the sonnet form. But I guess if you give up the stricter Shakespearean ties, then its much easier.

I think "we" would be better in "You let it go" to keep it personal.

You could drop "ours" in "and then it wasn't ours"

What are tenterhooks?

The colons distract. Periods would be better.

I would make the sex more tender in keeping with the nostalgia of the occasion.

Good take on the truck stop rest, especially "ice for
the mind or a blanket for the heart." But the 24HR Mobile repair bit seems extraneous.

When you say ":) :)" in the title, I wonder if it's tongue-in-cheek. As I read, I think not. Maybe :-(

And "Stupid" means something like "Arogant"

Shave your legs, girl, put on a dress, and have a drink. That's what I do.

Somehow the last line sucks. Sorry, I don't mean it that way, it's just the narrator was "siophoned out" and using the foreign "you're" changes the mood. Otherwise good.

Leave out the parts that tell us what we think - "We all have." "you enjoy it." Your idea is good, but look at the grammar, and be a little slyer (is that a word?) in how you say it.

"I lept to love you" - good. But some of of it is not stated very well. Example: "make the world accept you." - impossible, isn't it.

I like the somber rhythm. Wish you'd spell out linoleum.

mermaid?

Funny, we each posted a womens-clothing poem at almost the same time, yours with a sadness, mine with a hope.

I like yours a lot, maybe a little jealous of her.

The rhythm is so good that the few lines out-of-rhythm really stand out.

You've got some great images here.

mind's eye
brain's gray matter

Oh my goodness! Belay that, I feel I have no goodness. What a romp! I want to ask if it's fiction, but won't.

Yep, it's hard to keep silent. I can feel it! Mostly well said.

what? Say again.

It seems at first that an Ode could not also be a Pimple. It seems also that wit should be with. Then, "note" seems it should be a written note following "runes." If it's a musical note, then "dual" could better be "tied eighth notes" and "tripple" "triplets," and "peak" "crescendo."

I'd drop "that" from "that I can control."

I think it is neither ode nor pimple, but free verse.

The first verse is good.

A few too many words, otherwise good. "in" in the first line, "that is" in line 4. What does "so" add, or even mean, in the last two lines?

The ending doesn't work because nothing points to it or develops it. It doesn't fit.

Very naughty! Go straight to your room!

Yeah, It does look like a galaxy from space. A comma after sink would clarify. A wet what?