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on some deleted poem 10 Aug 2005, 6:45 AM
The rhythm is so good that glytches really stand out.

For example:
With four paws to cuddle to you
And two eyes opened so wide?

could be:
With four paws to cuddle you
And two eyes opened wide

on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX 8 Aug 2005, 2:05 PM
In the language of prayer, all references to God are customarily capitalized, including "You." Eventhough is two words.
on Prayer 2M by peahunky 8 Aug 2005, 1:58 PM
love = faith? Is that what you mean?
on Philosophy King by crooked_smile 8 Aug 2005, 1:55 PM
I got 1/3 through this and gave up due to errors in spelling and lack of proof reading.
on The Beatles by i_am_the_popsicle 5 Aug 2005, 4:50 PM
It's been 2600 years since Plato said it. What are we going to do?
on Never born. by | Broken | 5 Aug 2005, 4:59 PM
CS Lewis says that even the most ideal cirmstance falls short of providing satisfaction. The best marriage, the best friendship, they all fail to fulfill our wants. It is probable, therefore, he goes on, that only by looking to a force beyond the limitations of humanity can we find satisfaction.
on Writer's Block by shadows 5 Aug 2005, 5:01 PM
heap of words - yes.
on Letter Number One by not_a_philosopher 5 Aug 2005, 5:27 PM
Dear Me,
Your're insane!
Love always,
You
on Mirrored by MacFrantic 8 Aug 2005, 2:07 PM
Cute, but could be cuter.
on Dear Aunt Leonard by T. Jonathron Remp 8 Aug 2005, 2:09 PM
Silly
on My Prince by XOXScottishgrlXOX 9 Aug 2005, 7:52 AM
"two" "dark"

Would you love your Prince if you discover he had lied to you?
on REMEBER by prettyktm 9 Aug 2005, 7:56 AM
You've got potentisl for a good poem here, but the grammar is terrible.
on Home by Bethy 9 Aug 2005, 6:54 PM
I like the rhythm.

She walked up and down

paw > pa?

The last 2 lines confuse. Maybe you mean "she'd do anything but go back there"
on some deleted poem 12 Aug 2005, 1:07 PM
David questioned, why can't we?
on The cat who would fly by nentwined 12 Aug 2005, 7:15 PM
Do you mean "off my face"?

"a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing.

It does seem that simple sometimes.
on some deleted poem 12 Aug 2005, 7:21 PM
"permutate" seems too strong. Otherwise I like it.
on Forever by my side by RGSsparky 12 Aug 2005, 7:23 PM
Good thoughts, but need better poetic expression.
on sculpture by ThePariahDog 12 Aug 2005, 7:25 PM
The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
on Shadow by TLRufener 12 Aug 2005, 7:27 PM
I like it except for the use of "them" and "they" in referring to a person. The ending is great.
on some deleted poem 13 Aug 2005, 10:40 AM
Why do you want to trade what you have for propriety? Is it not better to be what you are? Maybe I misunderstand.

I never let Nobody in. > anybody in?