on Crack baby by Caducus
6 Jul 2005, 8:30 AM
Ahh, drugs. super. Ever seen a crack baby? ghastly.
on some deleted poem
6 Jul 2005, 8:30 AM
no
on some deleted poem
6 Jul 2005, 8:35 AM
mnnnmmnnnhhhnnnnuuuuuuuuugg
on Crying Tears with No Home by TLRufener
7 Jul 2005, 9:30 AM
Not terrible but the grammtical and spelling mistakes are very noticeable. If you're going to write a poem in honor of your friend, you should at least take the ime to proofread it.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:13 AM
Has it escaped your attention that nobody likes puns?
on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
11 Jul 2005, 11:28 AM
Good rhymes. Not wild about the poem itself, but I'll give you a 6 for that.
on A World At War by Damien
11 Jul 2005, 11:32 AM
If you're going to write about something like this...and be as graphic as you have, for God sakes, man, don't rhyme.
on JUST A FEW by rbooey
11 Jul 2005, 11:37 AM
Please refer to my reply to your comment on the suggestions page for my reason for giving this a 0.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:38 AM
You're one of the few people here that actually seem to be learning how to write.
on Slice Open My Body by TLRufener
11 Jul 2005, 11:39 AM
boo. You can and have done better.
on Flies in the ointment. by darby pyn
11 Jul 2005, 11:43 AM
I'm confused as hell on this one.
on When my place is placeless by Prince of Void
11 Jul 2005, 11:44 AM
Good God, man.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:46 AM
You need to be able to connect all this a little better. It sounds good, but a lot of it feels like it's just jumping from place to place.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:47 AM
Ok, this one's not good.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:48 AM
This was kind of good whe I read it real fast.
on some deleted poem
11 Jul 2005, 11:49 AM
better.
on some deleted poem
10 Feb 2006, 9:14 AM
ha