replying on Paradelle of Progress by Dovina
6 Jul 2004, 10:53 AM
When last I fought the sixest paradelle, the referee admonished me about using "only those words" by instructing me that I could use other forms of "only those words." This allows "thinning forms" or "emotionally blank" "and other aberrations. Perhaps, my English prof was an aberration. Still, a -10- for 1/6th of a complete poem... Are you going for a combined score of 60 for whole poem? I'm drawing a nervous, emotional blank on the proper score.
on Worst Sex Ever by Brittanyy
4 Jul 2004, 6:46 PM
Are you sure his name wasn't "Little Willie?"
on Translation by Dovina
3 Jul 2004, 7:32 PM
It is very beautiful.
on Lady Bradburyâs Excursion by Dovina
1 Jul 2004, 7:47 PM
I'm lucky. With my ruffles over my head, I stand to tinkle and make the wood donut even more dreadful on future other's hindquarters.
on Black streets of Hackney by cpill
29 Jun 2004, 10:01 AM
Do you think "The Clash" was at fault? Hard to decipher.
on Titleist and Socrates by MacFrantic
29 Jun 2004, 9:51 AM
Fun to imagine as one reads, sees the threesome walking along, the caddy asking question after question while Tiger gets annoyed and Ari smiles at his old teacher's complete lack of golf etiquette.
on Captain Napkin Starring In "The Passion Of Napkin" by horus8
29 Jun 2004, 9:02 AM
Cute.
replying on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina
23 Jun 2004, 6:14 PM
Zidiot-
I don't understand. Are you writing in "tongues?"
I don't understand. Are you writing in "tongues?"
on The Riddle of Creation by Dovina
23 Jun 2004, 7:22 AM
Perfect for "Seventh Day Adventist's Monthly." Not my pint of ale. Why do we capitalize the word god? It can't be a name. Isn't it an occupation? It is a little like capitalizing the word mechanic or poet. I'll stick to capitalizing only the name of god, Guinness, Jose Cuervo and the like. I know, hate the subject not the poem. -9-
replying on The Sea (revised) by Dovina
22 Jun 2004, 8:51 AM
Raw or grilled with liver and onions?
on Drunk and Fucked Up by wilco
22 Jun 2004, 8:35 AM
Resonates.
last chance cigarette
drunk & fucked up (two different states of being?)
Yeah.
last chance cigarette
drunk & fucked up (two different states of being?)
Yeah.
on The Sea (revised) by Dovina
22 Jun 2004, 8:30 AM
Good.
#1 why clean clear not clean, clear?
#2 why not
And after that
I loved the sea.
Was it for form's sake?
Besides, I like repulsive pink people at the beach... especially with wasabi, soy sauce and a side of ginger.
#1 why clean clear not clean, clear?
#2 why not
And after that
I loved the sea.
Was it for form's sake?
Besides, I like repulsive pink people at the beach... especially with wasabi, soy sauce and a side of ginger.
on Center Of The Universe by Dovina
21 Jun 2004, 7:53 AM
I fill with wonder.
on Army Dock (Bangcock in July) (Free Curse) by Rug by <{Baba^Yaga}>
19 Jun 2004, 7:51 PM
Did you mean "odd" instead of "queer"in the first line?
Are the piss and shit references about the Asian SARS epidemic?
I think the Bangcock in the title is self explanitory. Am I right?
"Asswagon's blender," Daiquiris?
Help! I'm trying to understand the "walk on the wild side."
Lot's of strong images -8-
Are the piss and shit references about the Asian SARS epidemic?
I think the Bangcock in the title is self explanitory. Am I right?
"Asswagon's blender," Daiquiris?
Help! I'm trying to understand the "walk on the wild side."
Lot's of strong images -8-
on Shamefaced by Doug
17 Jun 2004, 7:59 PM
I like the idea and the follow through. I trip over some of the images in line five. I think you mean "You're sure to know Him" right? -8-
on The Stickmen of Fools by embersandenvelopes
14 Jun 2004, 10:53 AM
ATT GSM, Grrrrrrrrrrrrr.