Re: Winter Wonderland by raven_the_poet	14-Feb-06/10:33 AM
Sounds like something that would suit a villanelle, with a little expansion.
Re: a comment on In response to by INTRANSIT	14-Feb-06/10:26 AM
Yet only one recipient of the (rather highly prized, at least among a certain school of thought) Orange Award. I thought nentwined had stopped giving them out!
Re: a comment on In response to by INTRANSIT	14-Feb-06/10:18 AM
Check the name and poems posted.
Re: a comment on Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	14-Feb-06/10:17 AM
Glorious!
Re: discovery by skaskowski	14-Feb-06/10:09 AM
Nonsensical, but isn't that the point of this poem? I quite like the imaginings here, but then again I would.
Re: Valentine by zodiac	14-Feb-06/10:05 AM
I don't know the story behind it very well, but that will have to wait for another time. This is excellent, zodiac - another triumph for you!
Re: a comment on A Midnight Call by amanda_dcosta	14-Feb-06/10:01 AM
I thought he said he liked this poem! And it's quite refreshing to hear someone who is evidently devout take a more relaxed attitude toward other peoples' beliefs, if I may say so.
Re: a comment on What is Love? by edgar-allen-poe-rox	14-Feb-06/9:55 AM
That is precisely why I asked. I don't have a clue who you are, all I know is that I've seen many people post their first poems, get 'criticised' on here, and go fucking psycho. Hell, I've even done it myself. But you posted it on a public website where anyone can say anything about it; I chose to give you the chance to explain who you are before I wrote anything regarding this poem. If I'd left it I can guarantee someone else would have written something critical of this and judging by your reaction you'd have gone off the handle at them. When I was fourteen I'd written loads of poetry, all of which was bullshit, but at the time I thought I was God. Read any of my replies to poetandknowit for an example of what not to say to your critics. I'm not trying to insult you, I'm not trying to belittle your poetry, I'm not trying to wind you up. If you want to write poetry, well good on you. But if you want to post it on a public website, don't get livid at the first thing someone says to you. Because contrary to your beliefs, I don't want to put you down, nor do I want to knock your poetry. I don't consider myself to be a particularly good poet but I'm always willing to make suggestions as to what *I* would change in another poem. I don't want to say what you *have* to change, because everyone's opinion varies. But there are some fucking awesome poets on this site and you or anyone starting out writing literature can learn a hell of a lot from them. I did. Now if you want my suggestions, tell me so. If you don't then I won't waste either of our time further.
Re: What is Love? by edgar-allen-poe-rox	14-Feb-06/9:24 AM
Before I write a proper comment and risk incurring your wrath, do you want constructive criticism or will it make you rather irate if I write a less-than-flattering synopsis? I've been there myself with the first few posts; tell me what you want before I rush to conclusions here...
Re: a comment on a waste of time by hendrimike	14-Feb-06/9:17 AM
I went to get a Masters In fact I just got plastered
Re: Panic Slide by MacFrantic	14-Feb-06/2:35 AM
Cars? I'm not too sure about 'very long racing stripes', the 'very long' is really simplistic compared to the rest of it. Catchy though.
Re: Journeyman by Glasseyez	14-Feb-06/2:30 AM
'Seen four the seven seas', is that meant to be '...four of the seven seas'? Because if so I think it would work better as '...four of seven seas'. If I'm missing something obvious here, bear with me. I'm tired. I think the grammar and structure could do with being worked on, but I like the content and images - they could do with being brought out a little more though.
Re: Sonnet for Snow by ecargo	14-Feb-06/2:24 AM
A collection of fantastic lines; not only that but it made me go and find out what 'soughs' means...my learning for the day is done.
Re: Happy 40th Anniversary by Dovina	14-Feb-06/2:21 AM
'Of what fabric are wishes made?' - perfect.
Re: Twenty-Some Years and Five Countries Away by drnick	14-Feb-06/2:18 AM
For genuine apology there ought to be regret, not that I need to apologise for anything here because I love this poem.
Re: stellar by ThePariahDog	13-Feb-06/4:34 PM
In an odd sort of way I really like this...
Re: caught amist by LaasChijld	13-Feb-06/4:33 PM
Second line of the last stanza doesn't make sense, a couple of spelling errors but other than that a very respectable effort.
Re: A Soldiers Story by Glasseyez	13-Feb-06/4:29 PM
Lines 17-20 = awesome. The rest is good but a little untidy; the rhymes are sometimes forced and grammar could be better, having said that however, I did enjoy reading this and look forward to reading any edits of it.
Re: In response to by INTRANSIT	13-Feb-06/4:24 PM
All throughout that poem I could hear a distant horn; a ghost of one of your lost kin maybe, or so I thought. Turned out it was my brother playing GTA3 in the next room.
Re: a comment on The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	13-Feb-06/3:33 PM
Well this whole piece is supposed to be about trying to write a piece of literature through use of metaphor but it not quite working - hence the slightly disjointed imagery here. The idea is that the lady in this poem is an allegory of the poem, but I am using imagery and metaphor to describe her (and therefore, indirectly, the poem). She's an idol in the sense of the narrator being absolutely obsessed with describing her; but adulterous because so many descriptions have been used by many other people before. And so on. Too pretentious perhaps? Any suggestions will be gratefully received.