| Re: Romans 8 by Freethinker1602 |
23-Apr-03/11:33 AM |
Just remember-there's always somebody who's got it worse. Could I put in a request for a happy poem? Not to worry, hee hee!
Anyways, I like the ending here-I'll give it an 8
Good morning everybody (unless you're over here in which case Good evening)
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| Re: a comment on "Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. by Bachus |
23-Apr-03/11:30 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Havin a Slash by Blade |
23-Apr-03/11:25 AM |
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| Re: spring by <~> |
23-Apr-03/11:23 AM |
Hi z, it's nice to see you back-you haven't logged in for a few days from what I've seen. I was beginning to worry for you.
Love the poem...it's perfect for a haiku (which I suppose is useful!) 9 I think would be a fitting score.
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| Re: Loss I havn't yet known by cleverdevice |
23-Apr-03/11:19 AM |
Hey cd how's it going? Have you revised anything yet? I most definitely haven't. Ah well.
Nice poem, short (heh, it's a haiku), blunt and certainly true. It's already garnered a 7 so that shall be the standard by which I shall follow. Good Evening, sir!
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| Re: Havin a Slash by Blade |
22-Apr-03/10:23 AM |
Dude, what the fuck? I assume you're not talking about your own brain, cause on the evidence of this you wouldn't even notice if you shat it out. Funny poem though...
(0 to try and get you into the bottom 15)
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| Re: For my wife by INTRANSIT |
22-Apr-03/10:20 AM |
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Even better! The breeze is used much more effectively this time. 9
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| Re: a comment on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger |
22-Apr-03/10:15 AM |
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Cheers bud, I'll have a look and see what it's like in sonnet form.
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| Re: This Night by adrenalize |
20-Apr-03/1:37 AM |
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Make this one far more erotic.
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| Re: Dreams by adrenalize |
20-Apr-03/1:36 AM |
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Yes, I agree. Surely nitol is the answer?
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| Re: Salt Water by OneFingerAnswer |
20-Apr-03/1:29 AM |
Beautiful, if you can excuse me being British. I think line 3 is the best. 8
(As an alternative word for silly, maybe you could actually use 'childish'? Just a suggestion).
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| Re: Sarah by talking_goldfish |
20-Apr-03/1:22 AM |
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| Re: When the Future Comes to Pass by e1ementfire |
20-Apr-03/1:17 AM |
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Sounds like Corrosion of Conformity. Now whatever happened to them...
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| Re: a comment on "Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. by Bachus |
20-Apr-03/1:07 AM |
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Excuse me? I have nothing wrong with the z, I was just saying that there's only one p. You seem to have misunderstood the fact that I said this poem's great and just has one typo. Is that a crime?
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| Re: I'm a ghost by Mutant_X |
19-Apr-03/1:27 AM |
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There's definitely potential here. I would like to see it more emotive rather than all the emphasis being put on rhyme, but it depends on how you want it. 7 anyway, nice work.
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| Re: a comment on Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger |
18-Apr-03/1:38 PM |
Thanks Lunar, it's nice to see that there are some believers after all, hee hee!
Hey, an 8's a nice score-not stingy at all!
See you soon (happy Easter)
xxx
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| Re: a comment on Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish |
18-Apr-03/1:35 PM |
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Ah, I see you're from bonny ol' Britain too! Good evening then!
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| Re: a comment on Toute ma Vie by talking_goldfish |
18-Apr-03/1:34 PM |
That's okay. Nice to see some adventure in the poetry on this site. Now we know that you can do this try to do something more extravagent. You're obviously talented at this, so give me something to smile about!
Good evening (over here it is anyway)!
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| Re: a comment on won't let out by Freethinker1602 |
18-Apr-03/1:26 AM |
How about pi? Try maths. Or then again...
Weebl is The Man.
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| Re: a comment on psudobackstabber by Freethinker1602 |
18-Apr-03/1:24 AM |
Ouch. Being betrayed by friends is the harshest thing in the world.
If I was a knowledgeable person I might be able to offer some advice, but it isn't my business either.
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