on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2003, 11:30 PM
brave and raw.
on Love Greased by Jeremi B. Handrinos
9 Apr 2003, 12:43 PM
less-than-silent lucidity. you just can't be stopped.
got an mp3 of this one yet?
got an mp3 of this one yet?
on Before The Miscarriage. by scitz
24 Apr 2003, 7:35 AM
fuck all.
now, critically speaking, eliminate the rhymes. they cheapen it.
now, critically speaking, eliminate the rhymes. they cheapen it.
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 7:42 AM
overload.
i will not be assimilated.
i will not be assimilated.
on some deleted poem
24 Apr 2003, 7:10 AM
there are so many things i like about this:
that the betrayal is necessary.
that death pales in comparison to the damage here done.
the cruelty in S2. and the humor.
the violent hand and needy tongue.
dark eye. thumbed rules.
riding to the hills, to run, instead of running to the hills, to hide.
that THE dog is not "my" dog.
the enormity of geography.
the only weak spot i see is this:
"But somehow, somehow
They are not enough."
you are rationalizing here. so i will deduct one point, lest the gods think it perfect.
that the betrayal is necessary.
that death pales in comparison to the damage here done.
the cruelty in S2. and the humor.
the violent hand and needy tongue.
dark eye. thumbed rules.
riding to the hills, to run, instead of running to the hills, to hide.
that THE dog is not "my" dog.
the enormity of geography.
the only weak spot i see is this:
"But somehow, somehow
They are not enough."
you are rationalizing here. so i will deduct one point, lest the gods think it perfect.
on Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT
23 Apr 2003, 7:02 AM
my my my. someone has been doing their homework.
this rocks.
this rocks.
on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2003, 7:08 AM
this poems bites hard: the lion's tooth loosed in too-warm air.
on some deleted poem
9 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
you tried this at home, didn't you? with out adult supervision? and you weren't a professional on a closed course, now were you?
on Hunting for a vessel by Nice guy
8 Apr 2003, 5:22 PM
this one's awkward:
Is there adequate oil
to supply the lanterns?
too many questions; yes must be the answer.
why must you always have it your way?
Is there adequate oil
to supply the lanterns?
too many questions; yes must be the answer.
why must you always have it your way?
on Phalus by Bobjim the II
8 Apr 2003, 12:53 PM
this measures about 2X life size on my screen--about 4 1/2 inches in length.
trash it, bj.
trash it, bj.
on Poemwanker is a bad bitch by Bobjim the II
8 Apr 2003, 12:53 PM
what? do you really really want a sore red one and little orange wings?
poof!
you got em.
poof!
you got em.
on some deleted poem
8 Apr 2003, 8:22 AM
shit, settle. why didn't you tell me i had a sex change?
on The sky is falling by INTRANSIT
8 Apr 2003, 8:30 AM
hahahaha.
on Fraternity hazing the sheepdog by horus8
8 Apr 2003, 8:43 AM
nice. hoop. la.
on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus
8 Apr 2003, 1:49 PM
she wanted soft shells
for him, oreganato--
a fingerbowl, please!!
for him, oreganato--
a fingerbowl, please!!
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
10 Apr 2003, 8:20 AM
pig,
what do you want from me? editor's comments, or a woman's comments? or both? rsvp, z
what do you want from me? editor's comments, or a woman's comments? or both? rsvp, z
on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2003, 7:06 AM
swank.
on I am a dream by mozac
24 Apr 2003, 7:40 AM
lovely.