on My Mamma's Hands by amateurR
13 Sep 2002, 11:41 PM
pragmatic fingernails an interesting phrase but should only be used once ,or if intentionally reversed closer together ... paints a picture of death .... is that right ? .. 4
on pissed off pretentious prat by keatsImnot
13 Sep 2002, 3:35 PM
know whatcha mean .... us poets eh ? how special we are ! ... 4
on winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown
13 Sep 2002, 3:14 PM
ditto ... kinda funny .. 4
on Hard Times by beakism
13 Sep 2002, 3:08 PM
.. like the footprints ( new to me ) ... makes it a concrete poem ? ... w==h==e==e==l==s perhaps ... 4
on Life : Paradox by amateurR
13 Sep 2002, 2:59 PM
muddled , but then that's life ... is that the word which explains itself ? ... 4
on Torn... by loneshadow29
13 Sep 2002, 2:40 PM
the universe does not care about you .... work for your own 'salvation' .... 3
on Mermaid at Dawn by <~>
13 Sep 2002, 2:36 PM
aah , a real poem ... such a relief ... at the end is the questioning form and use of 'elusive ' tautological .... i like the bird ... self contained vs the twosome .... breathing exercises captures it too .... 8
on fairy tale by jlanza
13 Sep 2002, 2:13 PM
poetry by numbers .... should in be with in last line ? or are you in someone elses story
on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom
13 Sep 2002, 2:07 PM
this haiku sure has a lot of syllables .....
on constructed word poem #6 by david
12 Aug 2002, 2:26 PM
ubiquitous in tendency,. mmmmm nice
on The Girl Who Wasn't Me by psychedelic
12 Aug 2002, 2:09 PM
you are indeed alone but i wonder why acid-awareness doesn't make this joyful
on Something Strong by Kriss
12 Aug 2002, 1:55 PM
i dunno where p&k it gets off rubbishing your work ; just read the juvenile garbage he ( i assume ) writes . BUT imho it's not very good. Zinnai66 said it all ... keep on keeping on
on Lost Dreams by DirtyKurtsGurl
12 Aug 2002, 1:42 PM
first 4 lines are brilliant almost rocking but then wimps out into muzak
on BEGINNINGS by kawakurdi
11 Aug 2002, 7:17 AM
slaves do certainly think and zero came along way after big numbers ... some good images .."cold oven" i like
on life sucks sometimes..ditto by New Life Drug
10 Aug 2002, 2:44 PM
.life don't suck,it blows,from stranger quarters than you can possibly know ; self pity doesn't do it , wait a few years til you pity the world then top yourself because of guilt... anyhow, what happened ?
on I never Knew..... by SkateBoardGurl5799
10 Aug 2002, 2:36 PM
.... would be good if it meant something ...
on In my weakest hour, I find my true strength by Rainbow_chaser
29 Jul 2002, 5:38 PM
okay ... it's a concept akin ro rhyme which is more of a slave-master than is meter ... making the sounds fit the syllables .... just think it needs a rewrite
on My Angel by mytenderrage
29 Jul 2002, 5:02 PM
and fluffy clouds even .... my gosh !