poemranker ::20 most recent comments by pete (121-140) and replies

Comments bypete, 121–140 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on The Shining City by ErgoErgun 29 Jul 2002, 2:16 PM
the original was freedom from and ( mis- )translated as freedom to ..... just a thought ..... :)
on minute by flatliner 29 Jul 2002, 12:11 PM
. yes , .... thank you
on In my weakest hour, I find my true strength by Rainbow_chaser 29 Jul 2002, 12:09 PM
... you're a rainbow .... some editing may be in order perhaps ? scansion and suchlike
on The Gravity of Love by april fool 29 Jul 2002, 11:50 AM
.. somewhat prudish methinks , and the one without the other would make for a cold marriage
on The Price by Bluesee 28 Jul 2002, 5:33 PM
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on Clit by unknown 28 Jul 2002, 5:21 PM
.... lol ....
on Ode to Thomas by RosiePosie 28 Jul 2002, 5:13 PM
sorry rosieposie but yuck ! the truth and sanctity of your destiny needs more careful presentation for an audience of poets
on ~Witchcraft~ by Lenore 28 Jul 2002, 5:03 PM
hi , i'm sure this works as a spell but the rhythm and rhymed form tries to hurry me urgently along while i need to linger on the images .... found that a bit unsettling . but created a nice picture at the end
on Me and the Darkness by aurora 28 Jul 2002, 4:53 PM
..... still , mustn't grumble eh ! ... the old human condition doncha know ... :-)
on Zen by gothwalk 28 Jul 2002, 6:42 AM
the tao which is the tao is not the tao(iambic pentameter)
on The ONE by Eline 26 Jul 2002, 4:51 AM
too many cliches following one from the other .... one per stanza would suffice :\
on diving by keatsImnot 26 Jul 2002, 4:23 AM
the first two and a half lines made me laugh with its superposition of image forms (...screaming tranquility at us )..
on Tangled by mikeyh53581 25 Jul 2002, 4:23 PM
..... mandolin accompaniment , perhaps ; beneath a balcony
on Hate Me by lucky_cmc 25 Jul 2002, 4:20 PM
... yeah ....right ! ... nice if done to a rap rhythm
on Decisions by x311 25 Jul 2002, 4:07 PM
.... nah , carry on writing ... it's gotta be done ...
on to my best friend david by wowzers718 25 Jul 2002, 1:47 PM
the depth of feeling in your stuff is amazing but there's something about love poems that gets a bit yucky ..... very difficult to do without a poetic meta-structure ... so to speak :-\ ...unless i missed it .... a low mark with love
on ungle stop by wowzers718 25 Jul 2002, 1:37 PM
leave it be if nothing else happens and talk to him when you are an adult and to one or two close friends if you are still a child ......hth.....:-)
on older sister by wowzers718 25 Jul 2002, 1:28 PM
genius move putting it all on one line and forcing the scroll ...a true web-poem ....
on Little Miss Ogyny by [mojo] 25 Jul 2002, 1:15 PM
the thought is a gem but as poetry didn't quite work for me except as a springboard for further thoughts
on The First Proper Evening of Summer by [mojo] 25 Jul 2002, 1:11 PM
yeah ... the last two lines or three negated feelings of ? irritation ? at awkwardness ..compatable as a whole seemed to grate til i started with that line as a new breath/beat .. is that why there is a comma after seems in the previous line ?