Re: A Sonnet for Barbara by PatColvin	9-Jul-02/7:34 PM
a nice sentiment, but I couldn't get into the cadence of the poem and didn't really find anything to take out of it/remember from it.
Re: Orange by lindseyis	9-Jul-02/5:58 PM
very cute. reminds me of an exercise in berkeley's lower division poetry course. :)
Re: Digital Remembery by ifni	9-Jul-02/4:24 PM
hmm. ones and zeros are sort of the opposite of quantum, so far as I understand things. quantum is beyond fuzzy. beyond that, though, this is rather nice. :)
Re: If We Lived by ZCatcher	9-Jul-02/4:23 PM
very cute and very sweet. cool. :)
Re: To Mother by lynnstratton	9-Jul-02/3:15 PM
very beautiful, though I'm no theist.
Re: The Kipps by lilli	9-Jul-02/11:38 AM
weird. I think I have to check out some Austin Clarke. I almost like this...
Re: i've got this song stuck in my head by silvertongueddevil	9-Jul-02/11:35 AM
I like the flow to this. :) just before the end it peters out a bit, but I like the punchline. :)
Re: Office Worker angst by Adriaan	9-Jul-02/11:23 AM
well put. very terse, but somehow still pleasant.
Re: incidentally, all royalties to the estate of WCW by lilli	9-Jul-02/11:21 AM
I don't get it, but it seems like it would be nice if I did...
Re: mother venus by elmundo	9-Jul-02/3:12 AM
ecstasy? effigy. cute, overall. pleasant.
Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil	9-Jul-02/3:08 AM
that's pretty cool. I think you would be considered rather crazy. :) I like, though.
Re: just like the jagged dagger by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:07 AM
"cannot speak no more" do you mean "can speak no more/cannot speak any more"? sliceing -> slicing. barried -> buried. hurt's shouldn't have an apostrophe. apostrophes replace letters. (and until has one l). I'm having trouble getting what you're saying; I keep getting hung up on little confusions: "beneath my shallow bends" -- what are your bends? shallow? why does cutting your feet bruise you? wouldn't it bleed you instead? red? The comparison to the dagger is vague... if you're the dagger, then aren't you using yourself to use yourself to use yourself to use yourself against yourself? I can remember being 14 in texas. (port arthur) I don't really want to. :)
Re: trapoide by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:02 AM
definitely confusioned. :) fatality, unless you're punning off of fate? and I don't get "so know it comes" as know or now... they both lose me. illousion doesn't have the first o. and I can't even begin to guess what "trapoide" is. I'd say this is more freeform than ode.
Re: Through the eyes of life by Angel_of_fait	9-Jul-02/3:00 AM
until has one l. I don't understand "of mind". our hearts *were* beating hase -> has. se -> see. a cute poem, but didn't really move me.
Re: Whispers of the Night by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	8-Jul-02/9:23 PM
so long as you're still having fun. :) actually, I rather like "the air is brown with sound".
Re: Let's Do a Test by GAC	8-Jul-02/7:55 PM
very cute. :) [note: whate'er, not whate're]
Re: untitled by venusdemilo	8-Jul-02/5:32 PM
I like what you're saying here a lot, but stumble through how you say it.
Re: Bitch! by venusdemilo	8-Jul-02/5:21 PM
cute, but doesn't do much for me.
Re: lurcher for lunch - for James Kelman by roy rocket	5-Jul-02/1:48 PM
cute, but I've seen better...
Re: Lost by Jsylum	5-Jul-02/10:28 AM
the material doesn't interest me much, but the tone and rhythm are compelling, and the word choice poignant. :) heh. i said poignant. ;) but seriously, very cool. :)