on Spit wad by Shardik
28 May 2003, 10:07 PM
Dirty pool mate. Loved it!
on some deleted poem
20 May 2003, 12:12 PM
Wig.
on âDeath To Doughboyâ by The Martyr
10 May 2003, 11:40 AM
At least this had a point, and I can dig that, but your others fucking suck. 7.
on I laugh at those that call me freak by Freethinker1602
27 May 2003, 12:11 PM
No, but I might toot.
on Just those three little words by Alyssa91
29 May 2003, 9:33 AM
Well, it's not completely hopeless, and that's good as far as momentum's concerned. you do have a typo "asentence" that can be easily ratified with a -, notice, a-sentence, pronounced, ahsentence'.
on The joke is wearing thin by QUENDO
29 May 2003, 9:36 AM
you are a mere sutler in an overview of the war plan, sorry 10!
on geometry by skaskowski
29 May 2003, 9:39 AM
Time for a skaskowskian run children!
on Social Parody by skaskowski
29 May 2003, 9:40 AM
Ha! I lived in Troy. It socked. lol.
on Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie
28 May 2003, 9:29 PM
"to make new life, where theirâs once begun." was what you were looking for.
Otherwise succulentio.
Otherwise succulentio.
on Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie
28 May 2003, 9:31 PM
better yet
"to make new lifes, where their life once begun."
"to make new lifes, where their life once begun."
on Blush Of The Winter Rose by kassanna
27 May 2003, 12:28 PM
"He came in the winter of my soul" Yes! he came all over it. "Then when my petals regained vibrant blush
He stood back and smiled, and heaved a deep sigh". Baby, I would slurp on that tight little vulva of yours until you projectile orgasmed all over my dual face, and baby, I would gargle that hot steaming piss and go back for round 'the two'. I would introduce your ankles to your earlobes while my toes did the comforter dig/crawl. I would have my thumb prying in your hot sweet mouth while the other hand clenched head hair then I'd vibrate like an epileptic don juan until your eyeballs went satanic.
He stood back and smiled, and heaved a deep sigh". Baby, I would slurp on that tight little vulva of yours until you projectile orgasmed all over my dual face, and baby, I would gargle that hot steaming piss and go back for round 'the two'. I would introduce your ankles to your earlobes while my toes did the comforter dig/crawl. I would have my thumb prying in your hot sweet mouth while the other hand clenched head hair then I'd vibrate like an epileptic don juan until your eyeballs went satanic.
on I laugh at those that call me freak by Freethinker1602
27 May 2003, 12:13 PM
Perhaps you need more Kale in your diet albineato.
on Theology by dougsoderstrom
23 May 2003, 2:20 PM
You've succeeded in avoiding every theological philosophy straight down the board. Good Job! What exactly were you attempting to clarify with this piece doug? Proof you're asleep while you're awake?
on All A Mistake by Alyssa91
21 May 2003, 6:13 AM
Airbag barfbag.
on some deleted poem
21 May 2003, 6:17 AM
Jeremi, why are you so damn unique?
on Lost In Reality, Enlightened By Confusion by The Martyr
10 May 2003, 1:28 PM
A mouth full of after-birth.
on some deleted poem
10 May 2003, 1:34 PM
Good grief Charlie Brown.
on long time no write by New Life Drug
10 May 2003, 1:42 PM
"As the fiesta draws nearer, I sit in axious wait"
Anxious typo.
"rabbits" should be singular.
"promised land" should be present tense. 'promise'
End your stanzas with periods.
Who cares about the sentences.
Use more commas, just a few before 'ands'.
Remove your last stanza, it's ridiculous.
Other then that, nice poem.
I'd give it an eight now nine later.
Anxious typo.
"rabbits" should be singular.
"promised land" should be present tense. 'promise'
End your stanzas with periods.
Who cares about the sentences.
Use more commas, just a few before 'ands'.
Remove your last stanza, it's ridiculous.
Other then that, nice poem.
I'd give it an eight now nine later.