on Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes
7 Feb 2005, 7:29 PM
it seems that you put about 2 seconds of thought into your poems. And that is not a compliment. *6*
replying on On the Discovery of Cinder Cats and The Road More Traveled by MacFrantic
28 Jan 2005, 10:03 AM
If you are familiar with them, all of my limericks come in unrelated pairs. And thank you very much
replying on Road of Means by MacFrantic
25 Jan 2005, 9:20 PM
The first stanza describes the end of everything. Just as a story is "all told"
The second stanza says that the death of everyone is just a course of fate.
And the title suggests that fate has nothing to do with it. :'o
The second stanza says that the death of everyone is just a course of fate.
And the title suggests that fate has nothing to do with it. :'o
replying on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams
17 Jan 2005, 11:59 AM
O.K.
Smarter usage of semi-colons
The second one is awful
S3 L3-4 don't make enough sense.
The contradictory statements about the people around him and then applying these statements to your own character. When trying to convey realization, you are actually making this character one of the "hyenas". Mostly recognized in the two contrasting "unaware"s. This would be brilliant if it was on purpose, but the quality of the poem suggests that it was not.
Outskirts is one word
st[r]ings
Introducing the peoples' objectivity in the last line leaves readers a bit confused because it comes out of nowhere.
Smarter usage of semi-colons
The second one is awful
S3 L3-4 don't make enough sense.
The contradictory statements about the people around him and then applying these statements to your own character. When trying to convey realization, you are actually making this character one of the "hyenas". Mostly recognized in the two contrasting "unaware"s. This would be brilliant if it was on purpose, but the quality of the poem suggests that it was not.
Outskirts is one word
st[r]ings
Introducing the peoples' objectivity in the last line leaves readers a bit confused because it comes out of nowhere.
replying on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams
17 Jan 2005, 11:29 AM
Well, if that is the entire reason behind this poem, than I'll give you a *6.5*. This message is tired and the outlet of lonely bum is only too predictable.
on Revaluations by Beyond_Dreams
17 Jan 2005, 11:21 AM
Okay, I respect the subtle anger at humanity poem, but it seems that this one is missing a good point *6*.
on Bad-Ass Mudder-Fugger by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
17 Jan 2005, 11:09 AM
put it under concrete and you've got a *9*
replying on Nectar of Infinity by MacFrantic
13 Jan 2005, 11:41 AM
I do.
on Cigarettes and Masturbation by Lifeboatman
5 Jan 2005, 10:10 PM
Apathy:
Lack of interest or concern, especially regarding matters of general importance or appeal; indifference.
Still a good poem, regardless. I still can't believe I took time to inspect your faulty contradiction by way of thesaurus. *8*
P.S.
Indifference:
apathy demonstrated by an absence of emotional reactions
P.P.S. I am a f**king loser.
Lack of interest or concern, especially regarding matters of general importance or appeal; indifference.
Still a good poem, regardless. I still can't believe I took time to inspect your faulty contradiction by way of thesaurus. *8*
P.S.
Indifference:
apathy demonstrated by an absence of emotional reactions
P.P.S. I am a f**king loser.
on You Were a Jerk to me in my Dream Last Night by T. Jonathron Remp
17 Nov 2004, 6:28 PM
senseless and wonderful *7*
replying on Mice by MacFrantic
17 Nov 2004, 6:26 PM
That's because it isn't about mice. I'm glad you caught the metaphor. You're ridiculous.
on Cold Indifference by cuddlytiger17
21 Oct 2004, 10:02 PM
Quite "...", yes, quite. *9*
on A Better God by Dovina
21 Oct 2004, 10:00 PM
A very satisfying plan, if only it could be... *sigh* What the hell! I'm an atheist! *8*
on On the Discovery of Bacchus and Lovely Clothespins by MacFrantic
7 Oct 2004, 1:26 PM
This is my one hundreth poem on the site! Under three pseudonyms of course! Keep on keepin' on.
on The Shocker (or "Where to put your fingers") by Tits
27 Sep 2004, 8:50 PM
Two in the shooter
One in the pooter
Two in the fruity
One in the booty
Two in the snatch
One in the hatch
Two in the thrill
One in the grill
Two in the parter
One in the farter
Two in the tunnel
One in the chunnel
Two in the sponge
One in the grunge
Two in the fish
One in the dish
Two in the naughty
One in the potty
Two if she swallows
One if she don't
Two in the bush
One in the tush
Two and a tongue
One just for fun
Two in the lap
One in the trap
One in the pooter
Two in the fruity
One in the booty
Two in the snatch
One in the hatch
Two in the thrill
One in the grill
Two in the parter
One in the farter
Two in the tunnel
One in the chunnel
Two in the sponge
One in the grunge
Two in the fish
One in the dish
Two in the naughty
One in the potty
Two if she swallows
One if she don't
Two in the bush
One in the tush
Two and a tongue
One just for fun
Two in the lap
One in the trap
on My Swarthy Bane by MacFrantic
15 Aug 2004, 8:12 PM
thanks, this much I-------------------------------I
I'll be honest...I didn't read it *6*
Now I'll be dishonest...Keanu Reeves is a prolific pioneer of well acted films, and he should refrain from having his vocal cords and face burned/lacerated by chemicals, prefferably in pill form, blue or red. (I love irony)
Now I'll be dishonest...Keanu Reeves is a prolific pioneer of well acted films, and he should refrain from having his vocal cords and face burned/lacerated by chemicals, prefferably in pill form, blue or red. (I love irony)
on As I wait to shoot a mallard, I consider life by somemorepoetry
15 Aug 2004, 1:33 AM
The Associated Press has declared this one of the best pieces that MacFrantic has ever read. Of course you suckered me in with the ellipsis... *10* Great title!
almost a favorite. *10*