on Love by NinjaPoet
29 Jan 2003, 10:52 PM
The title of the film should be in quotations not apostrophes. That is unless you put quotations around what the character on the answering machine is saying, which would be proper and justify what your are doing at that point. Is "Weneverlaughedsohard" (note proper use) a word. I looked it up and it was not in the dictionary.
on The Thought Of It by Christof
28 Jan 2003, 11:39 PM
Still the best poem on the site. I would kill the all cap thing, but damn, who cares, this is just good. Had to come read it again.
on Dr. Skellington by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
28 Jan 2003, 11:33 PM
You are the one true king of the Masonic order of odd balls.
on missing time by Bill Z Bub
28 Jan 2003, 11:30 PM
The flip flopping of voice and context is awkward. There a a few nice lines, but there is still work to be done here.
on amanda by famenglory
28 Jan 2003, 10:50 PM
Is this about Amanda?
on Guilt by Freethinker1602
28 Jan 2003, 10:17 PM
You reached really deep into the crap bin for this one, huh?
on A Puzzling Girl by Imperfections
28 Jan 2003, 10:11 PM
A nice concept but I think the overall effort need more thought.
on Breaking Away by wickedemon4
28 Jan 2003, 10:04 PM
Best biking movie ever made, although if you notice when he it topping 50 plus MPH behind the semi he is in his small chain ring. But, hey, it is a movie. It is sad you titled such a bad poem for such a great sports movie. Shame on you.
on A Day, Wasted by Joyleaf
28 Jan 2003, 3:36 PM
Great use of the "statement". Fantastic use of telling rather than showing. Great use of "Party" three times in less than 40 lines, dude.
on Cover song by bondjedi
28 Jan 2003, 3:26 PM
How exacty is this a haiku?
on Unpleasant Morning by liljsmith87
28 Jan 2003, 3:25 PM
Great rap and rhyme!!!!!
on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
28 Jan 2003, 2:35 PM
Well, at least you still have the day job. Or is it done at night?
replying on me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar
28 Jan 2003, 2:04 PM
England you doof.
replying on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit
23 Jan 2003, 3:56 PM
So are you giving me a 26? Wow, you are sooooooooooo sweet DA!!!! xoxoxoxoxo
replying on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit
23 Jan 2003, 3:55 PM
The girls actually gave me that word. They said it. The money was for church programs that promoted....well. I wanted to put it in the first draft but did not know how. I told Z, she said it should go in and I struggled for a week to get it in there. I had it all over the place. I don't think it is sexual in the poem; it simply gives a bit more depth to what the girls are doing. In the physical world selling the wind chimes has to be for something. That would be there innocence, I guess. I think it relates to the narrarator and what he has ultimately turned away. His transition. It is weird, but the further a death moves into the past the more convoluted the images become when personalized. I can still put images of the physical event into a clear picture, but my grief is wrapped up in all sorts of mixed metaphors. Thanks for the read. I did not change the first line. But I changes the second!!
on Broken Tomarrow by DreamMachine
22 Jan 2003, 1:15 PM
Interesting spelling and use of grammar.