on Old Friends by breeza123
26 Oct 2004, 4:30 AM
unspeakably daft.
on Who is deserving of all my love by zodiac
26 Oct 2004, 4:08 AM
this is excellent. In stanza 8 perhaps you mean flinch when you write flich? or is flich a word I have never heard?
on Lost by Sweet Cheese
25 Oct 2004, 7:54 PM
melancholic? sweet cheese is a good name.
on Jesus in a leisure suit by Imago
25 Oct 2004, 7:08 PM
was he busing tables?
on The Ebony Orchid of Theta by Shardik
25 Oct 2004, 11:55 AM
eleven
on A Great Story by Krys
16 Sep 2004, 9:24 AM
absolutely the worst pile of dried alphabits i have ever read
on Hand Job by unnesessary
16 Sep 2004, 9:23 AM
this is a poem?
on Coward has a tail by LintyWeenis
16 Sep 2004, 9:22 AM
i dont know. but lintyweenis is probably the best screen name on the site.
on Overheard in a crypt: by fevriere
16 Sep 2004, 9:18 AM
starsky and hutch
on Band Ten Hut by LintyWeenis
16 Sep 2004, 9:06 AM
love it
on Parting at Morning by Sasha
16 Sep 2004, 9:03 AM
i like it. I would kill the rep at the end, but i can see its impact.
on Soft and Pure by Dovina
10 Sep 2004, 10:17 AM
dig it
on Mushroom Potion #9 by <{Baba^Yaga}>
2 Aug 2004, 11:10 AM
a modern skillet, dripping with fried pimples
on peanut butter sandwiches on a hot summer day by w~* ATHENA *~w
25 Jul 2004, 7:30 AM
did you spread it on toast? or did he shoot it in too deep?
on Poor Unwritten Rabbit by Dovina
20 Jul 2004, 10:03 AM
why illumine and not illuminate?
on Four and a half paragraphs of silence by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
20 Jul 2004, 9:45 AM
unspeakable
whether this is true or not, I cannot exactly say, nor do I particularly care.
I like the theme, and I think the language is well used in some parts, but, overall, I think you need to pull in the reins a little, as much of this feels over the top, but perhaps the "floweriness" of the language is apt after all. what the fuck would i know?
anyway, i think the ending is good, if a bit overplayed and somewhat cliche.