Re: A bar without alcohol by tre	jsd 147.9.165.67	13-Apr-04/8:22 PM
I think this poem is hilarious in weird ways. For doing such a good job with a topic such as the gym, I give it.. a TEN!
regarding some deleted poem...	dmb41 68.237.255.80	13-Apr-04/8:51 PM
what the hell? this seems to me like the biggest waste of time ever.
Re: Almost One by thepinkbunnyofdoom	tre 147.9.40.169	13-Apr-04/6:07 PM
absolutely loved it.
Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	tre 147.9.40.169	13-Apr-04/6:26 PM
good job expressing the emotions, this is amazing
Re: Help Me Water The Garden by Blindpoetry	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	13-Apr-04/6:27 PM
keep the last stanza sans last line and, well... save the rest for another poem. or something.
Re: sum of squares by nentwined	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	13-Apr-04/6:32 PM
a great flow K, I like a good rhyme when it isn't forced, and this one works well on a non-common sentiment.
Re: China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick by Enkidu	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	13-Apr-04/6:34 PM
broken here: "I do admit that little fit She threw hampered my clever plot" would rather seen "thrown" not bone rhyme with stone (bone is illogical) "ease so fair" blows.
Re: China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick by Enkidu	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	13-Apr-04/6:44 PM
stultus es
Re: China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick by Enkidu	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	13-Apr-04/10:07 PM
I want to think of this as you laughing at yourself, you writing a rather silly poem about a deep-felt hurt and making fun of the fact it was your affair that brought it all on.
Re: he's so good looking by GAY AS FU*K	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	13-Apr-04/10:10 PM
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Re: Ballad for a bad Irish accent by zodiac	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	13-Apr-04/10:46 PM
i was amused, and i think that Shuushin was mistaken about S3; you have to read it out loud, it flows better. however, i had a little trouble with S5, lost the rhythm. overall, very well done.
regarding some deleted poem...	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	13-Apr-04/10:50 PM
S1 was cheesy; other than that i enjoyed the poem. the broken structure really added to it.
Re: A bar without alcohol by tre	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	13-Apr-04/10:54 PM
this poem is different and refreshingly unique. however, i think that you could have spent more time on it; it sounds like you accepted the first rhyme that came to your head instead of looking for a better word that flowed more. for ambitious creativity, you get an 8
regarding some deleted poem...	ggawrysi 147.9.151.22	13-Apr-04/11:04 PM
lead us in a little more. you just right to the point too quickly; make us care about the person who slips away, it'll make the song more meaningful.
Re: being human by ggawrysi	zodiac 67.240.192.23	14-Apr-04/3:59 AM
Stanzas 3-4 are copped from Doug Adams. To wit: "Humans think they are smarter than dolphins because we build cars and buildings and start wars, etc... and all that dolphins do is swim in the water, eat fish, and play around. Dolphins believe that they are smarter for exactly the same reasons."
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.14.47	14-Apr-04/5:39 AM
I think this one is good. where are they...should be easy to spot, seems a bit clumsy. And i almost did not click when i read the title, glad i did though.
Re: Diary entry (edit) by richa	Caducus 195.74.118.205	14-Apr-04/5:51 AM
Agree with horus, the 1st stanza is quite expuisite in the way it is written. You are a fine talent richard.
Re: Mirage by Wulf	oftherealm 4.136.63.94	14-Apr-04/7:15 AM
i'd hav to agree with Supreme.. intolerably lengthy, but maybe you meant it that way - due to the subject?
Re: being human by ggawrysi	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.114	14-Apr-04/7:29 AM
you fail
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.114	14-Apr-04/7:45 AM
You definitely win the award for this week's most arbitrary line breaks.