Re: Around 4am at this time of the year by Nicholas Jones	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:20 PM
eh. convoluted language just for the sake of sounding poetic? it's a moment, but the moment has no context that makes me care.
Re: Complaints by jessicazee	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:25 PM
The bear took out my knee! Damn, I'm going to have to be more careful with what I watch. This has something, maybe, but it's too compact for me to get it and feel what I've gotten; I think it needs a little more flesh--but that's definitely no guarantee.
Re: Lonely Hearts by Stephen Robins	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:29 PM
Imititation Jam, Kennelling Lobsters? Hmm. Ah, VDs? Great for Valentine's, yes? Cute, much cuter than the blatancy of it belies... but not enough for me, still, to care. Too much reliance on shock value, I think...?
Re: Friday's Monday's June by Enkidu	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:30 PM
I like how this runs, but the obscurity reads like too much randomness to me. Nothing against randomness, but I need chaotic randomness, where there's a pattern if I can discern it ((and maybe I'm just not good at discerning)).
Re: Topography by MacFrantic	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:31 PM
Calypso and apogee? Hmm. Order.. and disorder--makes me miss an old techno album lost to age. too abstract for me?
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:34 PM
I laughed at the last line. I don't pay enough attention, though, and there's not enough in the poem itself to convey the full situation to me. Or maybe I just want it more complicated than it is.
Re: The Ballad of Rakesh Rajani, Court Reporter by Rakesh Rajani	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:35 PM
wow. ouch.
Re: Captured by Dovina	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:38 PM
those would have to be big hands -- a shovel, a pick, and a wheelbarrow? We're talking Paul Bunyan, here. I apologize for his tiny member, though--we didn't do enough testing on those pesticides. General impression--not interested, really. A curious idea, but I'm not buying. More context, maybe?
Re: The Medium of Dunce by Ranger	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:41 PM
Hmm. Interesting, maybe something clever, but both over and under told...
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:46 PM
awkward, but does well for being so.
Re: Celui by half.italian	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:48 PM
the last two lines are the redeeming glory, and the rest does well for being put so plainly, but... the thought's only so much.
Re: Ode to a Pimple-Lyric Spawned by Phalkon's Greasy Face. by SupremeDreamer	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:50 PM
hm. Do I need to make a new feature "poems inspired by this poem" sort of thing? nothing in and of itself, and I don't know Phalkon yet, so...
Re: a days journey by donmiguel1960	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/6:51 PM
ow. not a good ow. I sympathise, but only because, er, I do get where you're coming from. But not from the art of this poem.
Re: JUST A FEW by rbooey	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/7:05 PM
ouch.
Re: JUST A FEW by rbooey	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/7:05 PM
If you actually mean any of this, know that it is a very poor tribute. Which is not to be ashamed of--probably most tributes are poor. But if you do actually mean any of it, consider trying to improve it--or just move on.
Re: sad moments by rbooey	nentwined 76.167.62.172	15-Feb-07/7:07 PM
There is no happiness.
Re: Celui by half.italian	half.italian 76.172.249.205	15-Feb-07/9:08 PM
Thanks. I wish I had her back.
Re: Complaints by jessicazee	half.italian 76.172.249.205	15-Feb-07/9:21 PM
I really like it. I see something clearly. Dad comes home from hard work, to a child who wants to play. He just can't handle children being children when he's tired. I could be off, but it works for me.
Re: Friday's Monday's June by Enkidu	half.italian 76.172.249.205	15-Feb-07/9:28 PM
It's just fun to read.
Re: a self-conscious lack of denial by nentwined	half.italian 76.172.249.205	15-Feb-07/9:37 PM
Southern Comfort always brings me spirit wisdom.