hmm. ?

eh. images are... trite. done. dead. vapid.

HILARIOUS!!:) 9, lol

i have a hard time trying to understand, explain

i don't really like it, but its good work, =7

some scan problems, but overall nice. "her nose ... beautiful", for instance, stumbles me. I'd also put a line break between "her" and "she", and possible "she" and "her" to hint to the reader of the switch. 7.

cute. 7.

i think the whole thing is great, 10

could use some serious work on delivery, I think. it's cute, but it doesn't flow, and that loses it for me. 4

ugh. 2

I can't grip the concept, or really understand anything any of it, but i think its funny so i give it a six

i don't know about those other fuckers but i like it

I think you could have actually done something with this, though I'm not sure what. Definitely not this, though.

I think this is the closest to grasping at least some dignity in itself. There are a few spots where the cadence drops. I recommend dropping "back" from the first "back then" and "church" from "church Christmas". The second "again" strikes a painful cord with the first one. some two syllables would do well to replace "back again". 6. 7 with changes, I think.

Wait, don't tell me... is it you waking up after a heavy night with your face in a tramp's crapping arse?

hard to grip, but still very good

this stumbles for me near 'belated', or perhaps 'today' -- one syllable too many? ever patient should by hyphenated, I think. "stealing its blanket of twilight" doesn't quite scan right, either. I like this a lot, though. 8.

its brilliant, and i like the last to lines. 10

I'm with JC on this one. ish.

kewl, 8