rick, I liked this a lot. Good metaphor and imagery to enhance the poems content. Almost great but still worthy of an eight.

Nice work pally omally

unicorn blood and strudels. no!

I completely agree with Cadacus, this is definately the better of the two. What would be fun is to force yourself to follow a different rhyme scheme or poem type just to force your creativity in another way.

you'd know.o

What happened to my comment?

Beauty, as usual.

a powerful sentiment. the more you need the less you get.l

If men could be flowers, I'd be a tall red Canna. Fab read dear. Thank you. If it weren't for goils, who knows what us guys would do with all that time>:>

dont understand but i get the same responses myself

I think this is my favorite of yours. Toast! I stink! Shower time! YAY!

Tintagiles, Quite a production you have here. It needs to be shortened a bit and would be stronger by eliminating needless words. Also, the old English language in somewhat inconsistent. Example: "Be silent you. I have not come here to hear you babble..." How about: "I have not come "hither" to hear you babble..." Still, you kept my interest to the end and with a little work, you have the makings of a very good poem. And remember this about most good poetry...an economy of words works best so edit and edit again and again, cutting out the fat until your piece is lean and to the point.

Errr, looses everything in the translation.

i enjoyed your sketch work,and the comics. You're quite talented.

Wal*Mart.

I don't get it. Great title.

always a hoot.X

Could it be 'just before the fall'? This is the best thing I've seen so far besides Tori's 'I can't see New York'. Your masculinity always comes through in your poems, dustchoked and mangled. Glistening is a strong hopefilled word. You have tremendous promise. If I could give you a gift, it would be all the right accidents.

Very nice. No fat and well written. I enjoyed!

gota alot of feelin