Re: A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:55 PM
What? What is this? Date rape at second base? Jesus Christ...
Re: Life by AmberDawn	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:56 PM
You must be a FEELUCIFER.
Re: No more goodbye by ShaNoN+960317485	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:57 PM
I will "miss you smile" too, dunce.
Re: Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:59 PM
This would be great if the title Was 'There Is Life On Uranus" AKA 'The Humped Meat Loaf's, MMM-GOOOOOD"
Re: Ceylon Cries by Mona Lisa	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	3-Feb-05/4:42 AM
Surely Allah's tears do not need cleansing? Unless you think they become sullied when a load of Sri Lankan's live on top of them. By God you're probably right :(
Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:53 PM
Are you Hewey Lewis?
Re: A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.11.12	2-Feb-05/10:03 PM
God, I can't risk having nentwined misplace my reply again. Who knows where it would end up this time - on Brittanyy's last post, probably. Dovina, most feminists believe the sexes are different. Unequal, too, if you mean predisposed to different aptitudes and weaknesses which probably come out even if you can tally them all somehow and give things like petitpoint and soapopera-watching the same value as waging and winning wars and inventing aircrafts. You probably do; and I, with some qualifications, agree. That's not the point. The point is this poem is about a woman performing nude in a male arena for a lone watching man and thinking that's liberation. It's not. It's strippers' logic. If you were really empowered, you'd keep your clothes on.
Re: Ceylon Cries by Mona Lisa	Mona Lisa 172.212.126.101	3-Feb-05/4:32 AM
For those who dont know Sri Lanka is known as the teardrop of Allah for its shape looks like a tear.
Re: iron coil by Shit-Crumpets	little_big_nose 163.153.198.103	3-Feb-05/5:57 AM
I don't think you meant for this to be a great poem, but I'm under the impression it means something speical to you
Re: Ducks With AIDs (a feeble attempt of something different) by Blindpoetry	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.249	3-Feb-05/9:14 AM
A joke from this week's POPBITCH(http://www.popbitch.com): A man walks into a brothel and says "I've only got a fiver - is there anything you can do for me?" The Madam says "yes", and gives him a duck. The man hands over the cash, and disappears upstairs with the duck. A couple of weeks later he comes back. "I've got a tenner this time." he says, "What'll that get me?" The madam hands the man another duck. "Hold on!" says the man, "How come this duck is a tenner when the other one was only a fiver? "They're both bloody ducks." "Ah yes, that's right", says the Madam, "But this one doesn't have AIDS."
Re: Broken by singinkygal	fevriere 62.254.128.4	3-Feb-05/9:31 AM
Oddly I like this, to begin with, but if there are no words to speak, how can you even squeeze a rhyme out of a poem? Have you considered cutting it off after "or what is right"? The "heart's heavy song" coul be the title - 'tis a redeemable line but the best poetry is the best words (e.g. for a poem on this theme, few?) in the right order (to give a sense of dullness, emptiness.
Re: An Ice Revelation by Nateislate	fevriere 62.254.128.4	3-Feb-05/9:43 AM
.. Hopefully this poem is more than just a (successful) experiment with line indentation.
Re: Enrapture by fevriere	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	3-Feb-05/10:08 AM
This doesn't really make any sense, but it sounds ok.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	3-Feb-05/10:30 AM
Even though you just forced rhymes to use big words, some of it's worth keeping.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	3-Feb-05/10:31 AM
Mundane, but well said.
Re: Save our Self(revised to be a trek into the vent tent) by Crakyamuni	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/4:01 PM
I revised that crappiness. I'm completely ready for all negative stabs and jabs. Bring the pain.
Re: A Thing I Must Do by Dovina	Goad 84.140.192.31	2-Feb-05/4:15 PM
This is really good. I liked the first two stanzas, particularly the second. I didn't like so much the meta-commentary of the last 7 lines. If you are serious about this one, try rewriting the last half a few times and see if you can stay in the image more and let the image make the commentary. (it's the old show not tell. First two stanzas are Very Good showing. Last two are more telling)
Re: 32 Truths and 1 Lie by wilco	Crakyamuni 131.252.180.201	2-Feb-05/4:24 PM
Right now the telephone is the heaviest object on Earth. Goddamn man. You have mentioned at least a dozen truths from my book. After the comment you made I had a sense you were good. Genuine in your condition. Keep this love alive.
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:51 PM
A tender loin.
Re: Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	horus8 24.130.62.63	2-Feb-05/6:52 PM
eh...