Re: The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:14 PM
The tradegy of war... I sometimes wonder whether the real tradegy isn't war, but you, and you're appalling poemes :(
Re: leaning back to far by celticskatermatt1	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:15 PM
Is this about chair safety? It's brilliant.
Re: Emotions Color Your Thoughts by cuddlytiger17	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:08 PM
Beautiful... what colour is hope?
Re: Kaleidoscopic (Re-Edit) by Sasha	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:10 PM
Great use of "Nope" to rhyme with "kaleidoscope"!!11
Re: DEATH by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Dec-04/8:58 AM
Five misspelled words. The last line is preachy and better omitted.
Re: All About Mistakes by travelingsk8er	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:17 PM
Just when I thought it couldn't get any better, you include an utterly random chorus at the end. Nice one!!!11
Re: Poems for devolution by richa	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.153.196.50	5-Dec-04/12:20 PM
"not doubt"?
regarding some deleted poem...	celticskatermatt1 68.7.187.148	5-Dec-04/4:26 PM
this Jon was the most dumbest poem ever
regarding some deleted poem...	celticskatermatt1 68.7.187.148	5-Dec-04/4:29 PM
axsome man fav line..Ten-shun! Present arms!” The judge opens the door and hopes, “Coming, Dear.” kool
Re: The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	celticskatermatt1 68.7.187.148	5-Dec-04/4:31 PM
could be a bit more intruging
Re: Winter Disaster by Sasha	celticskatermatt1 68.7.187.148	5-Dec-04/4:33 PM
this poem was a disater( jk ) very nice!
Re: DEATH by celticskatermatt1	travelingsk8er 68.7.187.148	5-Dec-04/6:10 PM
deep.....real deep
Re: This Time Imperfect by RGSsparky	some deleted user 203.217.92.81	6-Dec-04/12:34 AM
you fuckin idiot! i hate you! this is Davey Havok from AFI's work, how dare you steal this! take this down now. youve got some nerve trying to pass this off as your own
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Dec-04/9:00 AM
Economical, tight, well told story.
Re: The Rockets’ Song by Dovina	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.219	6-Dec-04/9:03 AM
Are rockets are a phallic symbol in the title? ...for war is life to us, -not death—(Is this death necessary?}. Yep,war is romantic until it touches you with stray bit o' metal. -9- Ask Michael Moore for the extra point to make it a ten.
Re: DEATH by celticskatermatt1	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.219	6-Dec-04/9:09 AM
Did you mean "strick?"
Re: All About Mistakes by travelingsk8er	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.219	6-Dec-04/9:13 AM
How can she walk away if she's on skates?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.219	6-Dec-04/9:15 AM
Love the idea. Maybe a serious re-write in the future?
Re: Corner Shop, 5 Quinton Road by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Dec-04/9:16 AM
"damson" as a verb? Some unusual and interesting language, "aped by girning monkeys," "cantering blurs," which needs a comma, I think. "there tone" should be "their tones." Right? The last verse lacks the punctuation of the first two. Interesting!
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.6.101	6-Dec-04/9:22 AM
sorry, I don't get it.