horus8
replying on The Folded Ways Your Eyes Cave by horus8
2 Jun 2004, 2:22 PM
I used it 4 times because this is a villanelle you idiot, look it up, LMAO! ASL?!!!! You fucking lapsnorkle. ha ha
It's a villanelle, you dimwit.
one of the worst poems ever
a big head in california
the size of horus8's ego
painful if you are a poem
by horus8
the folded way your eyes cave...you really like thaat line don't you..really proud of that one....so good you used it four times
oh bollocks...pretentious twattery from a person who has got nothing better to do with their life than spend it all on this site and writing dull pretentious twattery judging bythe anmount of crap he/she has posted up on here. i was hoping you'd surprise me horus. i was wrong. horus8...king/queen of the poemranker postings...you sad fuxwit
You've sure captured Dylan's talent for easy rhymes and bullshit "metaphorical" nonsense.
Maybe it's because he doesn't give a rat's ass about insulting you properly.
I bet you a million dollars you won't read his poetry.
horus...your put downs are witless shit. i hope your poetry is better.
okay codeine kid...i claim full responsiblity for the angry chickens, at least you slag me off with a modicum of wit..horus..you don't like my stuff..have you nothing better to do than to hang around poemranker spilling your not very clever bile with all the rest of us sad little people. Can't wait o check out your own stuff..oh i can't wait
It does sound kind of like some of Dylans writing...Somethings not quite right though...I'm not sure what it is...I'll have to think.
I liked it up until the very last line.
okay...sorry about the "angry chickens" but there are really no other kind..honestly...at least i didn't go for plucking and clucking!
Hairy pie. this is fantastic. a woman under the covers never ages. i bet there's loads of "poets" on this site wish they'd wrote that line. Stunning.
you don't live near that pub do you? The Slaughtered Lamb or whatever it's called...the one on the yorkshire moors as immortalised in American Werewolf in London? Just thought i'd ask
"Who be that stranger yon barrr?"
any suggestions for the last line? Your husband and Murphy are a cosmic pain in the ass this week.....
parallels!!!
Titan...i'm reading your stuff and there seems to be a recurring theme here...you seem to be a happy fun loving guy who obviously enjoys winding up the more pretentious elements on poemranker and you make me feel embarressed about my own miserabilist self pitying tendencies (I'm not a trainspotter however...THAT one really is made up okay) (is it really a coincidence that poemranker rhymes with w.....???
) but Titan...are you getting enough?
i love the narcotic...robotic (ally) bit. full marks for even thinking you could get away with it. and also the line about "emotions welling" most people would have gone on to rhyme it with "penis swelling" or summat but no...you lead us astray ther reign us back in with "she put her hands across my mouth to try and stop me yelling" genius!keep up the squiggling and squirming!!!
Don't forget to thank John k for single handedly making the drummer from Def leopard join the band blind puma, and chopping off his other arm, in order to play the drums by merely face thrusting into a an industrial can, a mouthful of peanuts, sucking off all of the salt, and shooting them at the snare like a fixed rain bird sprinkler, fucking asshats.
This is a lyric, and bangless at that.