Re: a comment on Hairball by jessicazee	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	25-Mar-07/4:00 AM
That is a good way. Tell me more about onji? I know not.
Re: a comment on a days journey by donmiguel1960	donmiguel1960 69.120.223.250	25-Mar-07/2:22 AM
good reply, the problem is neither do I, but thanks for the feed back.
Re: A twisted Trail in Eden’s Garden by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:51 PM
Choices and hindsight, glimpses of hidden possibilities all written here. Not 100% sure of the meaning, but I appreciate what it brings to me.
Re: Guarded Fool by drnick	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:39 PM
Love this! So stringent, seems to hold form of a rhyme scheme then loses it, excellently played out, not only in words but in the way the mind tries to be bound by form, only to lose it and let it flow...make sense? I usually don't...
Re: the magic rock by nypoet22	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:35 PM
You could lost the 'but'...always seems a way of apology for what went before. Very clever write, and one to hang on the mind for a while.
Re: Hairball by jessicazee	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:31 PM
Nice images, well I say nice because it appears without force, as for the actual image..real nice!
Re: a comment on The Finding by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:27 PM
Vague? Yes-I guess I am. The Search and The Finding are connected. I appreciate your review and honesty, which is why I decided to join. As for the guff, a word I haven't heard sinse the old country-but I have a nice pile of it handy. Many thanks.
Re: a comment on Paper Maker by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.132.11	24-Mar-07/8:16 PM
Over-prepositional? Not a clue what you mean by that. Indulge me please, for I am ignorant. Thanks for reading and commenting!
Re: Guarded Fool by drnick	Dovina 208.127.114.163	24-Mar-07/4:33 PM
Either join the army or a woman. The last two lines suggest the latter, and so do I.
Re: the magic rock by nypoet22	Dovina 208.127.114.163	24-Mar-07/4:24 PM
Yes to the first two questions, no to the third, and ace to the last verse.
Re: The Finding by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.114.139	24-Mar-07/8:56 AM
Advice is a form of nostalgia. Dispensing it is a way of fishing the past from the disposal, wiping it off, painting over the ugly parts and recycling it for more than it's worth. Thus I render what they have often preached to me: you are too vague; some nice lines in your three poems here, but whatever they are saying is too well camouflaged. But you’re doing okay here and seem able to tolerate guff, and thus might last awhile.
Re: Hairball by jessicazee	Dovina 208.127.114.132	24-Mar-07/5:58 AM
Writers in English often think haiku must have three lines with 5, 7, and 5 syllables, a misunderstanding of the Japanese onji. Concision is key. thing on my rug, I forgot to wipe thank you cat Just a suggestion.
Re: Paper Maker by Skamper	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:56 AM
some good lines --- 2nd stanza's first words over-prepositional, maybe marry up a few lines? Love: "with shoulder-shrug cares"; "try to stick them/felt-tipped". Good.
Re: Oops by John Rambo	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:51 AM
I love the word "sac".
Re: Settling In by jessicazee	jessicazee 65.30.187.185	24-Mar-07/4:49 AM
You rule.
Re: Untitled by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.128.94	23-Mar-07/10:05 PM
Are you all related? Has anyone fled this place in tatters? Speaking of the reviews here, not the poem. which is lovely, I like haiku and even sweetness has it's place..nice!
Re: Thinking for you by J.B. Manning	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:52 PM
Just Out! Standard answer... did you forget the 'e' in slime?
Re: Whispers the Pariah by Enkidu	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:41 PM
Nice/twisted/descriptive and fast! I like the suckling as it feels like the shore is a parasite on the mountains it washes upon. Not sure about using 'from' in the line...bursts from within...Reads just as well without, humble opinion only.
Re: A Lesson by nypoet22	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:36 PM
My kinda class - energetic and noisy..
Re: The Small Ones by Dovina	Skamper 202.6.132.194	23-Mar-07/9:34 PM
Middle-age takes another step toward the doddering of those past thinking, while the young, who survive become the wise - all heads now nodding. Fabulous write and imaginative story-telling.