-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on A Fractured Egg Shell by newdawnfades
30 Oct 2003, 3:32 PM
Please don't joke about my comments. I feel as if you're trying to trivialise them. There are times when humour is appropriate and times when we need to think seriously about life. I'm not one to hold a grudge, but I'd be grateful if you could think about what I've said. Thank you.
Should I thank you or 'think you'? ;)
the subject choice is not original; love fire/fire burns.
But nevertheless I think you writing has quite a lively voice, though somewhat archaic.
I'm milked, like your Halloween costume! My blood tastes more like a fine blend of absinthe & moosehead
I'm cauterized & hard...you busy later?
1st critique all over again, & then some... if only you knew!!!?(sp.)
10!- for throwing Cro-Magnon to a yet, more primordial form!
Hmmm?
well?
uh?
ok then . . .
ok ur mom is Mrs. Schwiser?
you little wanker!that my mom...
great start!!! but then you made an arse of it??
My idea of a late night toss. 10!
No, but today I had my teeth cleaned?
Well, i figured it had to follow a definate form, so i thought concrete was best description.
This was very sweet - Naive, but sweet. Unless you've lived through a 4 year old whom you have to chase through a store - you've no idea - and the sweet sentimentality doesn't last...
As for Doylum's comments - if you're only lasting 2 min 12 sec. or bangin someone who does - they've drugs for that now - you may want to check into it...
The last two lines are actually Arabic... I'm not 100% on the correct spelling, since the language doesn't translate overly well to English spelling, but they mean "It is an ugliness by which our eyes are sufficed, so that they crave not any beauty or marvellous sight." The quote is from an untitled poem by Abu-Tamman.
someone should beat you with a spade. I'd sell tickets.
As long as you use glad hands, they're not a problem.