King Abdullah I
on OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird
11 Jul 2003, 2:48 AM
Get out of the Top Twenty and stay out!
OnTheOtherHand
replying on How To Make Up Without Saying I'm Sorry by OnTheOtherHand
11 Jul 2003, 1:40 AM
I think you're off base. I'm already gay. It's not something I need to convince myself of. Matter of fact the convincing often goes the other way. Perhaps you know first hand about this?
Oh and by the way if I did that then I'd have to rewrite all but two stanzas. That's the way a vilanelle works.
Thanks for attempting to offend me. I'm touched that you care. Unfortunately for you it's going to take a lot more effort than that. Good luck and long life. You'll need both if you plan on getting a rise out of me with pitiful attempts like that.
I'm going to make you eat your poems so that you can discover what shit tastes like.
RUBBISH
She was a dirty whore anyway, and she cheated on you twice without you ever knowing.
This is rubbish. I think you should rewrite the first stanza as follows:
I could still convince myself to be gay
I could make myself if I wanted to
But you'll have to get out of my way
Interesting
Number 11 on your list should read "King James" not "St James" you INFIDEL
Thank you- much appreciated I have more on the subject tune in later
Please...lol.
Ah, I probably wouldn't use this on my poetic resume per say, but it's good propaganda. Yeah, I know the feelin'. Anyhow, whenever you feel like talking or want me to help you edit a piece... just let me know, it doesn't have to be Satanic, I was just practicing swinging around my new tail is all.
Thanks...read up on me, eh? ;) *shrugs*...I know I have a lot to learn, I only write every once in a while anymore...and most of the stuff I feel like writing is 'cause I feel miserable with the situation I'm stuck in (job money blah blah blah)...anyways, I won't go on about it. Interesting writing...tired, don't know what else to say...*passes out*
Have you ever heard of banal me lad? Look it up cause this is a great example.
(the letter that slips, that is)
Yes, it shatters, meaning, I guys we know it's not a letter.
"holding the letter with a bottle" -> "it slowly slips out" sounds like the letter slips out. but it shatters. ?
beyond that, rather nice. :)
Yes, Why! why! Because, your poetry is a sheasar salad with a tiny shnapkin and no fork. I hope these are the last words you ever write, because your shit fu is weak your sharate is weak and your face is a shit sale.
A fish shitaco with shitillas (warm).
Yes...I know. I have set the keystones of evil.
FUCKING COMMUNIST GARBAGE
THIS IS THE BEST POEM YOU HAVE EVER WRITTEN