marvelis
on Man In A Street by kalikopeli
10 Apr 2003, 5:17 PM
Personally it's not that bad. I mean some of the lines don't rhyme which is bad, in my own opinion. But the idea is so unique it tends to overshadow the lack of rhyme, partially at least.
Why all the limericks?? Why must you shame the irish so?
Not Very Witty
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get
Yeah I have Almost On Line(AOL)'s Instant Messenger(AIM for short). Other than yourself I don't know of anyone with With an MSN messenger. About the lesbian pursuits... So have I but in most cases no one calls it that case I'm a guy.
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How ever did you know?? I do. In fact quite alarmingly so.
piggy, i got that. a poem like this will get you chicks. when you battle your demons for *love*, chicks dig it.
as for people thinking you're a freak, so what?
i'd rather that, personally. stir things up a bit. maybe get them thinking. so, when i wrote my oedipus stuff, i posted it. personally, i hope they do find me freakish. because i'd rather be that than complacent any day.
it sucks that your dad was afraid to show loving kindness. it really does. but that's no reason you should hold back, especially if you feel yourself wanting to express it. sex is so much better when you can forget about perceptions and enjoy the other person, and how you please each other. lavish it on, piggy. it's good to love. trust me. and girls put up barriers too, so it's a double-fuck until you find someone you can let them down with.
i'll have to give you the edits later. got no time today. send me your email, and i'll send you a more complete commentary. xo, z
someone likes green day...
my attention span fluttered away...boooooooring.
this sucks cock. i like it!
rock on, baba. rock on.
don't rape the rhyme scheme with random drivel. it hurts my feelings.
poor, poor ironshoe. next time he'll run away on his stumpy nubs before anyone else can write about him in such a gross fashion.
sit right here and stroke my pubes. i like a girl who knows what she wants.
take up self-censorship.
get a real dildo.
take up drinking.
You need Jesus
How dare you. I'll have you know my parents were not stickmen, but a monkey, a goose and half a north american bison, so there!
very Twain of you to get off on torturing your characters. that's the way it should be done. bravo.