UnityMitford
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 6:55 AM
katie's back! there is some nice stuff in here. in the two "You thought you..." lines, you'll want to change the "where"s to "were"s. i like those lines, though. the poem veers from subtle to not so subtle, but it's one of your more solid poems (although what do i know).
UnityMitford
on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
5 Nov 2002, 6:49 AM
what happened to old Gay Angel, anyhow? he hasn't been around. and i thought he said one time that he lived in Indiana.
Nicholas Jones
on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
5 Nov 2002, 6:47 AM
Sorry, I got bored during point one. Do you ever worry that you're a deeping boring person?
how about "poemrankers = word-wise wankers"?
Fantastic! I knew somebody out there would answer my plea. I also like the innuendo in the third one!
SHUT UP ALL OF YOU
I don't know which would be worse: if this is sarcastic or not.
AIDS
Blade, the day you can manage to write properly is the day people will start to take you seriously. Right now your opinion means exactly dick to everyone except maria.
(Sorry I had to use you as an example.)
Cool poem maria oh and yardbird could kick the crap out of dark angel any day of the week
Hmm, cliched, shallow, meaningless. Only joking. Unlike some of the bastards here I think all poetry is good as long as it means something to the author.
I am completely dumbfounded and in awe of this comment. You sir are too brilliant for anyone's good. Why do you choose your subject matter as you do? Again you are a flawless and elegant marksman. I pray somewhere on this earth your talents are being used for good instead of evil. I guess that makes me the worst sort of naive bimbo. Oh well. I grow fonder of you every month. Like a pet anaconda who elegantly swallows the neighbors chihuahua, I don't know whether you should be destroyed or rewarded.
An easy and intelligent read.
Very effective. I completely ignore the first stanza because I have trouble understanding it. You should either through it out or rework it.
Hi Three Little Bears,
Thanks for leaving a comment, but I am sorry to say I do not understand it, as far as I can see each couplet of the the poem rhymes, not just the first half. Could you explain more fully what you mean.
i would of enjoyed the coffee maker a bit more, as far as things getting shut off go....here's an 8. even though i really think you're a wretched shite. 8.
another splendid thrust...here's a seven.all bad girls deserve a seven unless you're a man..than your an eight for making me need your shaft that much more. 7.
i'm giving this a nine, it's very good and interesting and all that alluring shite, but the structure needs some a bit more water tight integrity. 8.