The middle line speaks to me on several levels, suprisingly. I'm in a sensitive mood.

please do stick with this, and steer clear of politics. you are so fucking good at sense of place.

so. surreal. and concrete. and metal and blood and plastic and steam and vision. and haze. thorough.

you are a naughty boy and you deserve to be spanked. have a 9. you'll have to get the 6 yourself.

quality porn poems. dirty in a wonderful way.

I like the "back of a honda". Sounds like quite a time.

Now this, i like this. great imagery.

utter crap.

Sorry someone you knew is dead. That said, I'm afraid I agree with Dark Angel. This isn't that great a piece of writing. It's pretty cliched and really, what do you know of his motivation? The piece lacks fire if that was what you were going for and also sadness if that was your goal. I came in with an open mind for this one, but I was disappointed.

Wow! That's big and clever.

This is very brave, but perhaps it's all too close to write about.

Very nice indeed. I like the use of curled, and then curdled.

I like this a lot, but is 'constrewed' a word? Do you mean construed, or constrained? If you've made it up, that's ok, though - Shakespeare did it all the time, so you're in good company.

I agree. Way to counter bourgeois expectations!

Good, I liked this, though I would take heed of the good advice already given.

I meant dead poets, sorry about the typo.

Hi, I like the fact that this has some rhyme and rhythm, not that that is essential, but it oftens adds well. However there are a number of places where simple adjustments could make improvements. for example. The choices made on night before The choices made the night before substituting the for on here makes the whole thing more grammatical and flows just as well, thus it is easier on the mind.

It must be strange, knwoing someone who's a victim of this weirdo. Thanks for your comment by the way - I don't know why 'Instructions to a Sculptor' has taken off in the way it has, but it makes me happy!

mostly excellent.