How does a drum play? And what does it matter what day Easter and Christmas are on? Some provocative unintelligible lines here.

Speak to that squirrel on your windowsill if you will, or go tip-tapping with me on that birch. I am most surprised, however, to see a gentleman in a tatty coat.

The title is a bit cliche, and the endnote shows us nothing new. Allusions are good, but not carried through, not built upon. The old English is out-of-place when not used throughout.

Are you a Beatles fan? "Across the Universe." How that relates to the ancient manuscript, Nag Hammadi, or why it is mere noise, I don't get. The Word or Logos is, I suppose, begotten. Perhaps whatever you mean is too involved for haiku.

Hi, it's me again, sending you love in a voicemail.

I think, like others do, that you should use better grammar - mot necessarily perfect grammar, but something closer to conformity. That way, someone besides you might get what you're saying.

I thought of John Newton, an English slave ship captain for 20 years. He quit all that, sided with the abolition movement, and wrote the song of the movie's title, "Amazing Grace" When he got old and blind, he said, "I was blind, but now I see," and then asked the question, "Did I write that?" A good movie.

If it were not for your straining chief, Oliver, this could move erotically into a second verse of laughingly intense intimacy.

Yes to the first two questions, no to the third, and ace to the last verse.

Either join the army or a woman. The last two lines suggest the latter, and so do I.

So eat, drink and be merry for tomorrow you die. Give up all this senseless gloom.

Writers in English often think haiku must have three lines with 5, 7, and 5 syllables, a misunderstanding of the Japanese onji. Concision is key.

thing on my rug,
I forgot to wipe
thank you cat

Just a suggestion.

Advice is a form of nostalgia. Dispensing it is a way of fishing the past from the disposal, wiping it off, painting over the ugly parts and recycling it for more than it's worth. Thus I render what they have often preached to me: you are too vague; some nice lines in your three poems here, but whatever they are saying is too well camouflaged. But you’re doing okay here and seem able to tolerate guff, and thus might last awhile.

Take the l out of suckling

If you want the opening to draw people in, then make it make sense like, "Subsiding within myself" Also, reversing the normal order of sentences in two of the last three lines could better be undone. Some good feelings here overall.

Try cutting all the words that don't carry meaning, i.e.

thunderstorm hides
horrific story
scene of murder

575 is bunk.

Please don't vote yourself a ten; it's bad taste.

Starry skies
haunt my deep sleep
past memories

Just vague enough to keep distance, clear enough to intrigue. I love S4.

I think you want a period after bed in S4. L2,S5 needs a more descriptive last word I think; and "so" is a weak word. Otherwise this is unique and good.

Wouldn't it mean the same if you shortened it:

Start separately
Become one
She takes all your stuff

But then it wouldn't be 5-7-5. Pity.