replying on At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday by Limness
30 Sep 2002, 9:27 AM
okay Toby, i changed the ending.
replying on O Man Away From Me by Limness
25 Sep 2002, 10:02 AM
you are correct. it's gone now. the point was taken. actually, the idea for the last bit drew out, in part, from lucinda williams' 'lonely girls' on her essence cd.
replying on making progress (a piece of it) by Limness
25 Sep 2002, 9:49 AM
long cold hospial room, with regimented schedule (neat time). cars song has been struck from inference in line one.
replying on happy hour by Limness
23 Sep 2002, 10:59 PM
she loves the new vote. thanks again for the help. (note: see also--'making progress'--the cut away other half which descends not quite so slowly into madness.)
replying on happy hour by Limness
23 Sep 2002, 10:48 PM
try it on for size now. it still needs work, but it's getting there. thanks :]
replying on happy hour by Limness
23 Sep 2002, 10:36 PM
you sir, are absolutely correct. i shall split it and edit accordingly. thank you. that is exactly why id didn't work. damn, i love this site.
replying on happy hour by Limness
23 Sep 2002, 10:29 PM
ever find yourself wondering why the hell you are bothering with all of this shit (esp. at work)? sometimes, it all starts to slipppp awaaaayyyyyy....and it shows. i can see them move away from me in the elevator.
replying on O Man Away From Me by Limness
20 Sep 2002, 6:53 PM
ah. babbit had too strong a beat to be beaten. i am glad to see you peek out now and again.
replying on Spellbound by Limness
20 Sep 2002, 8:40 AM
I have edited it pete. Is it clearer now?
on lovely by pink_punk_kisses87
17 Sep 2002, 9:53 AM
necrophiliac. "A Rose for Emily" and one for pink-punk-kisses as well! Hurrah! still, it's evocative. Graceful-ly (you need the -ly). And, what 'other' do the eyes gently fall upon? Aren't they closed?
replying on America the Beautiful? by pink_punk_kisses87
17 Sep 2002, 9:49 AM
Perhaps you are the first to post this because you are the first to feel this way? I personally don't like the poem. I don't think it's good, and I wasn't going to comment at all, but your retort struck me as defensive and arrogant, so, I thought, what the hell, I'll throw my hat in the ring as well. Bad poem. Overdone topic. No solution offered.
replying on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom
13 Sep 2002, 12:58 PM
Thanks for clearing things up.
love, limness.
love, limness.
replying on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom
13 Sep 2002, 12:39 PM
Doug, I do very much get it. Maybe if you beat that dead horse a couple more times, people who have never even heard of poemranker will get it too. YOUR POINT HAS ALWAYS BEEN CLEAR. I thought that mine was too: I just don't think you did a good job with this one. Nothing to do with anything else, I just got a little sidetracked. Your poems are much better when there is more emotional distance between you and the topic. That is all. Can we drop this now?
on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom
13 Sep 2002, 9:05 AM
Wow. How poetical. I hadn't realized poemranker was a forum for this kind of thing. Couldn't you have written it in such a way so that it was self-explanatory? Wouldn't that have been the better option, instead of lashing out like this? Honestly, it wasn't very much of an effort. Why be so angry in your defense of it? Did you ever thinkg that they (the idiots, that is, were provoking you because the poem itself does nothing but make them cring? Sorry to be so harsh, but jeez!
on Waking Up by PawnedTidal
13 Sep 2002, 8:54 AM
Anger management. In written form. Healthy choice, PT
on she wonders, by <~>
13 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
Dreamy, and painful--now that i've read the comments. Hang in there; lots of fish in the sea (I know you don't want to hear that, but give it some time, dear, give it some time.)
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
12 Sep 2002, 8:17 AM
Who's next?
on untitled#3 by darby pyn
12 Sep 2002, 8:15 AM
I have tried, but can make no sense of this. which would be fine, if it least entertained me. but it does not. how sad.