on AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
12 Sep 2002, 8:10 AM
BRAVO!!!! WELL DONE, SIR! You are indeed a champion, and prove without a doubt that the keyboard is mightier than AIDS (but not mightier than Jesu, of course.)
on Not in front of the kids. by darby pyn
12 Sep 2002, 8:01 AM
Do you really want everyone to get stuck at the title? If not, I suggest you change it.
on Torn... by loneshadow29
12 Sep 2002, 7:59 AM
perhaps 'burdensome beast' would work better for you. a beast of burden is an ox, or the like, and i don't think you're writing about going around with farm animals strapped to your back. regardless, i hope that, by now, you have shed it.
in the Middle Ages, the church bell tower would call people (monks and nuns, especially) to prayer. It was used to mark time as well. Matins, Ave, Evensong--all of these were times of prayer throughout the day, either rung on different bells, or with different sounds. Matins was just before dawn. So 'toll the Matins' here, means sunup.
replying on At the Olde Absinthe by Limness
11 Sep 2002, 10:40 AM
Thank you.
because the pigeon is sleeping in the open square and the bells wake him? is that unclear? can you suggest a different phrasing? as for the old man, yes i did make that up myself. almost feels cliched, doesn't it? imagine that, something you see everywhere being paralled with something you see everywhere! wow, sometimes i amaze even myself!!
replying on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 8:05 AM
Okay then. But think about doing it my way. It works better.
replying on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 8:00 AM
But this is a fragment, not a sentence, and it begs a comma. S3 needs periods for consistency, if that's the flavor of the week.
on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
10 Sep 2002, 7:55 AM
Shouldn't it be "caonoe," (not period?) Do you need the periods?
on At the Olde Absinthe by Limness
7 Sep 2002, 6:55 AM
i edited. votes are nice. vote early, vote often?
on you're never alone by nentwined
27 Aug 2002, 1:10 PM
sleek.
on Mrs. Jones by unknown
27 Aug 2002, 1:03 PM
This sings a sad song, sung by many unheard voices. Too bad for all the Jones', Mr's and Mrs' alike