on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 7:12 AM
Is this a poem or notes for a poem you want to write?
on THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void
21 Oct 2002, 9:51 AM
OUCH, I THINK I MUST BE DEAF. THIS ISN'T A SONNET, BY THE WAY. A SONNET HAS FOURTEEN LINES AND RHYMES. SORRY TO DISSAPOINT YOU. HERAT HAS INDEED BEEN MISSING FOR A LONG TIME. 'TRON'? 'RESTTING'? 'REYS'? 'BEYS'? WHAT DO ALGERIAN RULERS HAVE TO DO WITH THIS?
on Unadorned by w~* ATHENA *~w
21 Oct 2002, 9:52 AM
Hee hee, silent voices... That's even funnier than my bird with lips.
on Why Did God Do This To Me? by TripleHGurl
20 Oct 2002, 6:41 PM
The more I read this, the more I notice the heresy inherent in it. Daring to claim God made a mistake... Daring to think that people only are taken by God if they agree to, which negates the full glory of the All-Mighty Baker of the World (who apparently left the ktichen for a moment and didn't realise he burnt the cake). By your own beliefs, God can do nothing he shouldn't do; the ways of God pass our understanding, as they say, and we must accept them all. You, girl, have the sheer GALL to question God'S might and Power, and Infinite Justice??? On your knees, girl, on your knees, and pray that ye be purged of the sickest sin of Pride, that Pride which led to Lucifer's own Fall, and blah blah blah blah blah blah blah. I'm sure you can get your preacher to fill in the rest with a nice little sermon on the evils of pride.
on Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus
19 Oct 2002, 6:24 PM
I confess I really like the ending. Cheers indeed.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 6:30 PM
Hmmm... either you'Re editing every fifteen and a half seconds, and I don't always notice the difference, or else this site doesn't like me voting on this particular poem. I'd swear this is the third time in ten minutes...
on Can't See by ThoughtfulSoul
19 Oct 2002, 6:54 PM
God's laughing at you. So am I.
on Remember-me (an ode to those dropped off at the clinic) by Bachus
19 Oct 2002, 7:10 PM
The P.S. is a letdown. You could have done better than that.
Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6
Heaven
Dear LIL ZAY:
We're afraid that your angel met with an accident; he was run over by a cement truck while sneaking away from you to go urinate. Unfortunately, we're rather understaffed right now, so it will be some time before we can get around to helping you. In fact, we may not be able to. We did ask for volunteers, but though one showed up, your obnoxious use of capitals turned him off -- he's rather delicate ears and didn't want to be yelled at all day. You could always ask the Devil -- he's rather a decent fellow if you ask the right way.
Regretfully,
Saint Gabriel Archangel
Spokesperson for God
Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6
Heaven.
Cloud 6
Heaven
Dear LIL ZAY:
We're afraid that your angel met with an accident; he was run over by a cement truck while sneaking away from you to go urinate. Unfortunately, we're rather understaffed right now, so it will be some time before we can get around to helping you. In fact, we may not be able to. We did ask for volunteers, but though one showed up, your obnoxious use of capitals turned him off -- he's rather delicate ears and didn't want to be yelled at all day. You could always ask the Devil -- he's rather a decent fellow if you ask the right way.
Regretfully,
Saint Gabriel Archangel
Spokesperson for God
Department of Guardian Angels
Cloud 6
Heaven.
on Unpleasant Morning by liljsmith87
19 Oct 2002, 7:20 PM
When I first saw this, for a second I thought it said 'Got up this morning,/Killed the cat...' It might be even funnier if you wrote a poem starting like that.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 6:20 PM
My God, woman, do you lie in wait and let me vote so that you can edit three split seconds after?
on Bowstones, 21st June 200 by Nicholas Jones
19 Oct 2002, 6:23 PM
21st June 200? My GOD you're an antique. I didn't know they had buses back then...
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 7:11 AM
Much much better. This time I don't mind voting for the... what, fifth, sixth time? Seems to make much more sense now.
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 7:14 AM
I really like the third verse and 'scurrying sandbaggers'. As for the rest... if I told you I found it boring, you'd think I was just saying that, so I won't. Let's simply say that I wouldn't buy a magazine for the sake of getting a copy of this. Or even print it out.
on Death's Awaiting by The_Shadows_Smile
19 Oct 2002, 7:17 AM
God help us all! Vermillion lives!
on some deleted poem
19 Oct 2002, 6:17 PM
Oh yes, about the poem, I rather like this one.
on Ghetto Symphony by anonymous
18 Oct 2002, 2:49 PM
Not bad as a series of musical images. Don't know if you tried to put the poem in sonata-allegro form -- it sounds like that a little, but if so it needs work.
on some deleted poem
18 Oct 2002, 2:50 PM
Haven't I voted on this four times in the last four hours now?
on I am free by blueclouds
19 Oct 2002, 6:25 PM
I am yawning