on The ABC's Of Adultery by horus8
12 Dec 2004, 4:27 PM
the catalogue serves the perspective to perfection
on Work by poetandknowit
27 Nov 2002, 9:34 PM
Change your name to IFUCKINGSUCK. This reads like a pathetic proxy for a 2pac rap, mixed with some piss and shit you found lying in your stack of unpublished poems. If you pride yourself on this consider going through puberty, growing a pair, then writing about something that isn't bromidic. Oh, and get rid of the shit you use for fountain pens and the stale piss you use for ink. Thanks bitch,
Love ErgoErgun
Love ErgoErgun
on Living Conditions by Christof
27 Nov 2002, 9:28 PM
This poem belongs in a nursery with other wreckless idiots who have no balls and spew shit from their mouths and asses whenever they see fit. This poem sucks. If you like it, you suck. Christof: grow some fucking balls before you to decide to piss in Microsoft Word, thanks.
on Volkswagon by ErgoErgun
28 Aug 2002, 3:12 AM
I enjoy your comments. What a wonderful relationship. =]
on Eleemosynary for the undeserving but forward foreigner by ErgoErgun
28 Aug 2002, 12:39 AM
No, piss on.
on Jesus was a necromancer by horus8
24 Jul 2002, 6:04 PM
You're into theatre? Have you checked out any of Sondheim's musical productions?
Oh, the poem... um... 6.
Oh, the poem... um... 6.
on Seasonal Memories by ErgoErgun
20 Jul 2002, 9:19 AM
My inspiration seems to come in a variety of forms, some of which, like this piece, seem more in tune with this audience's tastes. If you liked this poem I'd advise you to take at what I just submitted entitled "Volkswagon." Thanks for your comments, it's nice to see something uplifting against the negative dribble people usually proffer.
on Ethnic Smells by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
13 Jun 2002, 4:04 PM
I'll drink to that.
on Vigor Mortis by WarrenGDawg
16 May 2002, 9:30 AM
FUNNY AND PROVOCATIVE
on Ode to a Red Trashcan by nentwined
16 May 2002, 9:26 AM
Interesting tone.
on My Dark by crims0ngh0st
16 May 2002, 9:24 AM
Cut out the unecessary crap.
on Sloth and Expectation by ifni
16 May 2002, 9:23 AM
You could deliver such a profound idea in a more tasteful way.
on Nyctophobia by crims0ngh0st
13 May 2002, 12:22 AM
This is really rough. Polish it. Eliminate what you don't need and sanctify that which you do.
on Colloid by skaskowski
13 May 2002, 12:21 AM
Every word should have meaning to the integrity of the poem.
"As it rains outside
The drops are like tiny fragments of water
Falling like objects that are dropped..."
Telling me in a banal way what rain is isn't going to get you high marks. Remember to cut out everything that isn't needed, and say what is needed in the most beautiful way possible (that includes the obscene only when called for).
"As it rains outside
The drops are like tiny fragments of water
Falling like objects that are dropped..."
Telling me in a banal way what rain is isn't going to get you high marks. Remember to cut out everything that isn't needed, and say what is needed in the most beautiful way possible (that includes the obscene only when called for).
on geometry by skaskowski
13 May 2002, 12:16 AM
I like your meaning and parts of your imagery, but it could be made even more powerful. Extend the baby/killer dichotomy and tell me how that relates to innocence. Not bad though. =]