replying on Gothic by zodiac
3 Dec 2006, 4:35 PM
Pretentious git.
replying on upon driving through rural Washington by david
8 Jul 2005, 8:54 PM
Zing!
replying on "The Buick", or, "to my grandfather" by david
8 Jul 2005, 8:48 PM
Tremendously flattering comments. Thank you.
on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Jun 2004, 9:38 AM
I get the impression that this could be a far better piece without the constraints of the rhyme pattern. As it is, it feels a little disjointed and forced in parts, if only to fit the structure you've imposed on it.
replying on First Kiss by david
12 Jun 2004, 9:06 PM
I didn't 'cop' the idea, no.
on The daisy-chain girl by richa
11 Jun 2004, 10:54 AM
Lyrically, I have no problem. The language is tightly-wound and it sounds good. The issue I take, though, is more typographical in nature. The enjambment of the lines and that punctuation aren't doing anything for me, and I find it a little distracting to the point where it's detracting from my enjoyment of the piece.
replying on Earth, or, When You Take Me From This Good Rich Soil by david
21 Nov 2003, 5:07 PM
More, hm? I'll see what I can do.
on Independence Day (the speech from the film) by scitz
5 Jul 2003, 11:06 PM
While I don't necessarily object to adaptation (some of the finest poems have been birthed in such a fashion), there ought to be some effort put into the finished product. I see little evidence of such. No enjambment, no typographical changes. For all I know, you could have very well copy-and-pasted this from a web page. What's the difference between this and plagiarizing Shakespeare, Milton, Ginsberg, or Atwood?
replying on touch of the grass by david
5 Jul 2003, 10:57 PM
Thank you. It's one that I've had sitting about for some time now, scrawled hastily on a piece of looseleaf. I recently found it in a coat pocket that I was taking in to be drycleaned, and I thought it would be of sufficient quality to post here.
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
4 Jul 2003, 10:06 PM
Not tonight, nentwined. I have a headache.
on missing time by Bill Z Bub
4 Jul 2003, 8:17 PM
The diction is mellifluous. I am particularly struck by the enjambment and how it seems to contribute to the overall feeling of how well-crafted the piece is.
The only thing I take issue with is the question posed in the ninth stanza. While the diction and intent match, it seems awkward enough there to interrupt the flow of the piece.
The only thing I take issue with is the question posed in the ninth stanza. While the diction and intent match, it seems awkward enough there to interrupt the flow of the piece.
replying on touch of the grass by david
4 Jul 2003, 7:24 PM
Much obliged, my good man.
on My last ever poemranker transmission by King Abdullah II
4 Jul 2003, 3:46 PM
I'm reminded of how Aristotle once said that man, like elephants and bees, are inherently political animals.
replying on Night Letter to Yahweh by david
4 Jul 2003, 3:34 PM
HUT?
replying on granite hearts by david
4 Jul 2003, 2:07 PM
Thank you. Much obliged.
on Killbirds by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Jul 2003, 1:38 PM
I'm inclined to give a higher rating, if only because vilanelles are so difficult to write well. You've taken to the structure, and the narrative flow of the piece is intriguing.
on I am talented & good looking damnit! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Jul 2003, 1:28 PM
The repetition in this piece is delightful and well-crafted. There are certainly many cases of repetition ruining a poem, but this certainly isn't one of them.
on MotherF*ckers Who Fuck Above/Two Story Apartment by JoyLuck
4 Jul 2003, 1:14 PM
A wonderful piece in the tradition of concrete and typographical poetry. Well done.
replying on of the bad hard drive by david
4 Jul 2003, 12:54 PM
It is, yes. I'm surprised; I thought it would be fairly obvious. It's interesting to hear the other interpretations, though.