on ab*defg by Goad
19 Apr 2005, 1:27 PM
ye-es...you can, of course, remove keys from the keyboard.
on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
dosh?
on some deleted poem
19 Apr 2005, 1:31 PM
you probably dont need the commas in the G line, other than that not a bad ditty
on Good King Brownceslas by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
19 Apr 2005, 2:13 PM
You, sir, are the reason I couldn't keep my as yet unbrowned hands from this site.
on some deleted poem
19 Apr 2005, 1:19 PM
Fabulous-your poetry has got so much more intricate since I was last here!
on Five on Buddha against Bruce Lee by Luzr
19 Apr 2005, 1:21 PM
ha!
on Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
19 Apr 2005, 2:23 PM
Possibly the most convincing incentive for me to attend Church and become anorexic. In that order. If the Lord is not proud of you, I would be most terribly surprised. God bless.
on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone
21 Apr 2005, 1:38 AM
Ha! Yes please guvn'or!
on Reflections on the current U.K. general election campaign by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
21 Apr 2005, 1:50 AM
predictably enough this has been voted on...
on Breakfast by James Rykelangeli
27 Apr 2005, 9:59 AM
First 2 stanzas are very clever and quite amusing, after that you try to be too clever...let's face it, most people will think you've made a typo when you say 'cresset of the moon'. Or maybe it's just me. Maybe I'm simply retarded.
on some deleted poem
27 Apr 2005, 10:01 AM
Why bracket the 2nd to last line? It works fine without.
on some deleted poem
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
tip-don't use 2 for 'to'. People get irate at that. Hence why zodiac is being so tactful.
Spend a bit more time checking the typos, it makes it far less painful for the reader. 7
Spend a bit more time checking the typos, it makes it far less painful for the reader. 7
on The O&E Remix by writeleft
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Awesome, I love this poem! Maybe the last stanza is slightly detached, but to be honest I'd be lying if I said it made any real problems. 10
on Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Neatly worked, although it seemed to suddenly shift pace in the middle of the 2nd stanza. intentional perhaps or am i being a fool? 8
on Next time by Billy Fights
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Im surprised you classed this as a pimple - its far better than that, and the mere utterance of said spotty poetry turns a lot of people here off. 9
on The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Absolutely marvellous, squire.
on How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo
28 Jan 2006, 4:15 AM
Yes, I like this.
on Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus
28 Jan 2006, 4:23 AM
Another good idea from you, Master C - I do like DoubleU's suggestion, maybe make Alice be the cause of the other characters' fall from grace? Although having said that, the poem (as it is) gives a really nasty feeling of Alice's confusion, but I think that it's potential at the moment. With time it'll realise that potential. 7 for now, I will have another look at this later.
on Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta
28 Jan 2006, 4:27 AM
I'm not convinced by the last section...the poem's more compelling when you're telling me your experience rather than overtly trying to convince me. Still worth a 7, I shall remember to check any edits of this piece.