| Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac |
28-Jan-06/5:10 AM |
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There's an anger that this doesn't quite release in its current form. I'd have liked to have seen it as prose, but I shall have to content myself with being sonneted about the face and neck. Vicious, nearly violent.
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| Re: The Heart of a Man by Queen of Tease |
28-Jan-06/5:04 AM |
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Errm, is this meant to be serious? Not a bad poem, but I can't tell if you're having a laugh or not...
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| Re: In praise of racism by INTRANSIT |
28-Jan-06/4:54 AM |
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Demon opener! Didn't get the last clause, but I'm a bit slow at the moment. The rest is a grand take on human failings.
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| Re: Tree of Life by ALChemy |
28-Jan-06/4:48 AM |
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It makes me wish I'd seen such a scene in my life.
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| Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus |
28-Jan-06/4:45 AM |
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Awesome stuff, I don't care if no vagrant owns a Labrador, to him I expect it was one. Wonderful poem.
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| Re: Oblivion by Sway |
28-Jan-06/4:35 AM |
Not bad, unoriginal though. You've evidently got the imagination to better this.
Hint of the day: rhyming 'love' with 'above' (or 'dove') wil turn a lot of people off straight away.
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| Re: Him. by Sway |
28-Jan-06/4:32 AM |
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Having read "You." before this one I thought they'd be parts of the same story...am I missing something obvious? Very angsty but a lot better done than most.
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| Re: Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta |
28-Jan-06/4:27 AM |
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I'm not convinced by the last section...the poem's more compelling when you're telling me your experience rather than overtly trying to convince me. Still worth a 7, I shall remember to check any edits of this piece.
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| Re: Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus |
28-Jan-06/4:23 AM |
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Another good idea from you, Master C - I do like DoubleU's suggestion, maybe make Alice be the cause of the other characters' fall from grace? Although having said that, the poem (as it is) gives a really nasty feeling of Alice's confusion, but I think that it's potential at the moment. With time it'll realise that potential. 7 for now, I will have another look at this later.
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| Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo |
28-Jan-06/4:15 AM |
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| Re: The O&E Remix by writeleft |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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Awesome, I love this poem! Maybe the last stanza is slightly detached, but to be honest I'd be lying if I said it made any real problems. 10
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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Absolutely marvellous, squire.
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| Re: Next time by Billy Fights |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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Im surprised you classed this as a pimple - its far better than that, and the mere utterance of said spotty poetry turns a lot of people here off. 9
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| Re: Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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Neatly worked, although it seemed to suddenly shift pace in the middle of the 2nd stanza. intentional perhaps or am i being a fool? 8
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| Re: Actor by horus8 |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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creative, I like the initial loose rhyme. 'I was hoping for a thin Val Kilmer'...certainly sir. 9
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| Re: The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson |
3-May-05/2:29 PM |
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| Re: Breakfast by James Rykelangeli |
27-Apr-05/9:59 AM |
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First 2 stanzas are very clever and quite amusing, after that you try to be too clever...let's face it, most people will think you've made a typo when you say 'cresset of the moon'. Or maybe it's just me. Maybe I'm simply retarded.
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| Re: Reflections on the current U.K. general election campaign by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
21-Apr-05/1:50 AM |
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predictably enough this has been voted on...
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| Re: a comment on Gaping Hole by sonawrote |
21-Apr-05/1:49 AM |
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Actually the name Goad seems quite appropriate given the outraged replies to his comments
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| Re: a comment on A new leaf by Damien |
21-Apr-05/1:46 AM |
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Tis but a place for gentlemen, where cads and bounders abound not. I believe this place would be owned by Dark Angel.
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