on The Negro by Everyone
21 Apr 2004, 4:10 PM
Good God Lydia, I know you lean towards the right, but giving this -10- is taking things a little far!
replying on pain like mine by xunitedx
21 Apr 2004, 2:16 PM
-great comment-
replying on The Conqueror Worm by zodiac
21 Apr 2004, 2:15 PM
why are you so obnoxious holdstill?
and why do you give high marks to the least adept poems?
and why do you give high marks to the least adept poems?
on innocent voyeur by nentwined
20 Apr 2004, 1:29 AM
'the faces noeone sees' nope - you see them for a start and I am assuming the situation is public view so so do a lot of other people.
on forgetful dyke by elizabethann
17 Apr 2004, 11:04 AM
It is OK, relating of a fairly meaningless but nevertheless charming story. By the way unless your mum is a soul reever I very much doubt she 'brought you to life'.
on The Idea of Fusion at the Beach (After Wallace Stevens) by coffeespoons
17 Apr 2004, 10:53 AM
Well written, has a nice feel. I am left a little confused by the ending. You go from language as fire to language as soft stanzas to language as the wind.
on Severed Arm by jessicazee
13 Apr 2004, 7:09 AM
Quite good really, the language could be more punchy, but that is my only criticism.
on Ballad for a bad Irish accent by zodiac
13 Apr 2004, 7:06 AM
very good, agree with shuushin about s3 though.
on in perspective by That One
13 Apr 2004, 7:00 AM
The capitalisation is odd.
The pace is what you seem to be going for, but it does seem a bit cobbled together.
The pace is what you seem to be going for, but it does seem a bit cobbled together.
on self indulgent teenage-style poem needed to spew out. by Roisin
12 Apr 2004, 1:45 PM
nice, but metaphors are supposed to track and flames burning out do not leave poison behind.
on Are Gays From Uranus by scitz
5 Apr 2004, 9:50 AM
I thought you were religious. It is hell dear boy, hell!
on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
1 Apr 2004, 9:56 AM
The title reminds me of that panda gangsta book - eats shoots and leaves.
replying on Municipal park by richa
1 Apr 2004, 9:13 AM
what is true?
on Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom
1 Apr 2004, 8:48 AM
yes, the bridge line is the best, opera of obscenities is kind of disturbing.
You could always try writing a poeme that did not involve smoking a cigarette.
You could always try writing a poeme that did not involve smoking a cigarette.
on Astronomical by DeadtotheWorld
1 Apr 2004, 8:38 AM
Could do with being shortened, would help to manage the rhythm.
on hands by New Life Drug
1 Apr 2004, 8:14 AM
The repetition is a bit odd.
Like 'love with the right amount of personification' and pockets in hands'
Like 'love with the right amount of personification' and pockets in hands'
on Finest Hour by creedclay
1 Apr 2004, 8:12 AM
Nature could create a bird flying free. Only man could create the window.
A bit drawn out the sentiment here, you have five lines to say the bird has free will.
A bit drawn out the sentiment here, you have five lines to say the bird has free will.