poemranker ::20 most recent comments by richa (641-660) and replies

Comments byricha, 641–660 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on the small drop by richa 26 Jan 2004, 2:27 PM
A drop of water could be in a number of states of motion; one could be dropping every few seconds, one could be hugging the tip.

The wax on a candle is more the latter.

Would I compare a drop on a candle to a drop on a leaf? (mutatis mutandis)

only if I wanted the wax to be silver!?
on I Go On by drumrgirl30 26 Jan 2004, 10:45 AM
a bit cliched, I quite like the way you've stopped the poem dead at the end.
on Just Passing Through by southernboy71 26 Jan 2004, 10:42 AM
lines three and four are quite good, has a nice laidback feel
on World policy by penguin fiend 25 Jan 2004, 5:35 AM
Give your computer a rhyming dictionary and you are redundant with this poem.
on the small drop by richa 25 Jan 2004, 5:34 AM
a reworking of the loved child :

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp;jsessionid=az39OjE0y599?id=71142
on petal soft whispers by fair12 22 Jan 2004, 6:02 AM
The alliteration is a bit of an annoyance in parts. But that is my only pick.

Good stuff, plentiful
on Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing 22 Jan 2004, 5:59 AM
Personally I would say from an everything that exists in a place can not be said to be 'not meant to'. Even dead things.
on At The Station by Christof 22 Jan 2004, 5:56 AM
'Or the old dear collecting for terminal patients,' is not grammatical in the poem. It needs separating from 'either hustling for connections clause' which is talking about people plural.

Other than that good, is the formaldehyde reference inspired by damien hirst?
replying on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit 22 Jan 2004, 2:27 AM
More psychology lectures actually.

If I can electo-cute monkeys then I can electo-cute (learned cripple) numpties.
replying on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit 21 Jan 2004, 3:00 PM
Excuse me Professor (Stephen Hawking) I think your computerised mouthbox is jammed stuck on arse.
on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit 21 Jan 2004, 1:31 PM
Personally I think toilet poems are a valid art form.

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=2690
replying on sea of pearls by crwncka1 20 Jan 2004, 7:04 AM
It is spelt llama, and whilst I know of one mongoose on this site, I have never met a llama.
on Why you don't fall through the floor by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 20 Jan 2004, 12:59 AM
Are the maths community impressed when you post poems on mathsranker?
replying on (Come find me) by zodiac 18 Jan 2004, 5:28 AM
It is not just about getting it. From the first image of mushrooms I got it. You could have stopped there.

However you carried on and tried to build up a picture which is good. Unfortunately there were too many metaphors pulling the reader about.

Personally I like this and applaud the imagination. But you have to be wary that to get anywhere you will encounter poetry purists who insist on better organisation.

What goad says is correct, and comes from himself spending months being flogged in the eratosphere.
on sex in the city/sex in the country by tralala42001 18 Jan 2004, 5:22 AM
The first 3/4 verses are good, the end just degenerates.
on Doe by OneFingerAnswer 18 Jan 2004, 5:19 AM
Your last one about gayness was too clumsy and didactic.

This one is really good, the tone, much more thoughtful.
on across the lake by baden 17 Jan 2004, 8:08 AM
Seems to flow well bar the last verse. A little unremarkable though - would get a few marks on the dark angel mediocrity scale perhaps.
replying on EXIT (this way) by imperfect_creation 16 Jan 2004, 8:36 AM
http://members.aol.com/lucyhardng/pointers/index1.htm is a cool rescource too.
replying on EXIT (this way) by imperfect_creation 16 Jan 2004, 8:32 AM
Isn't repeating the sounds of consonants called consonance?
replying on EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 15 Jan 2004, 11:46 AM
some kind of artist I hear.