King Abdullah I
on OK, I apologize - it's steaming shite and no mistake, but it was the best I could come up with on the spur of the moment. I'm off to slit my wrists now, since writer's block has sent me spiralling into the depths of the deepest depression in human history... by Yardbird
11 Jul 2003, 2:48 AM
Get out of the Top Twenty and stay out!
Interesting
"holding the letter with a bottle" -> "it slowly slips out" sounds like the letter slips out. but it shatters. ?
beyond that, rather nice. :)
This is an excellent poem. Thank you, Mr Forsaken, for writing such a beautiful and delicate work of genius.
Number 11 on your list should read "King James" not "St James" you INFIDEL
Like a little whore
The kind who even fuck a door
They do it when ever their bored
Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha
THIS IS THE FUNNIEST POEM EVER POSTED ON POEMRANKER
I GIVE IT 10
SHEER GENIUS
This is rubbish. I think you should rewrite the first stanza as follows:
I could still convince myself to be gay
I could make myself if I wanted to
But you'll have to get out of my way
RUBBISH
She was a dirty whore anyway, and she cheated on you twice without you ever knowing.
I'm going to make you eat your poems so that you can discover what shit tastes like.
0o0o0o0o0o0o Spookey guy. I'm so scared. At least most of this one made sense though. I'll give you a 4 for the effort.
Have you ever heard of banal me lad? Look it up cause this is a great example.
Thanks...read up on me, eh? ;) *shrugs*...I know I have a lot to learn, I only write every once in a while anymore...and most of the stuff I feel like writing is 'cause I feel miserable with the situation I'm stuck in (job money blah blah blah)...anyways, I won't go on about it. Interesting writing...tired, don't know what else to say...*passes out*
I've seen more grammatical correctness from a chimp on crack. If Shakespeare was written by monkeys with a typewriter, then this was likely a mule's fart that knocked over an ink well.
Woah... Nope, still shit. But I do believe the texture of your shit is at least congealing now, forming what appears to be teen-angst shape pellets of chirpyness & despair. Poor thing, did your mom hose you down at night on the side of the trailor, and then tell you to air dry. Often the vulva tears right into the anus upon child birth, proving the quality of your ass hat young man.
It's a famous recipe.
1/3 cup teen angst
1/4 cup of pureed tiny penis
1/2 misunderstood homosexuality
warmed in a medium sauce pan while being
yelled at by a drunk man called your father
with a splash of his new girlfriend that's one of your classmates at highschool named pammy, telling you you should eat more beause you're all elbows.
Add a spritz of sherry and paprika, and you
have a pregnant girlfriend next year and no job
Congratulations! Want an olive?
Very good. I can imagine this beautiful song being sung with tender feeling by Elton John or Paul Simon at the funeral of a prominant politician. It brings tears to my eyes.
You are su-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-ch a c-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-u-nt
Nice
Very
Any chance of a pro-fascist re-write?
Very good. I hope to see a few more of these poignant yet life-affirming poems.