Mutant_X
replying on Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 3:44 PM
why do i always fail at understanding your twisted expretions?
For some reason, I've always been making SARS rhyme with arse. But it works said like that too.
yeah,some of you people write so good, but knowing that you've been through this makes me feel better,thanks,and sure i will check yours.
more and more i discover that i really appreciate constructive critiscm so thank you,you are really helping me.
in other words, I love you.
That is fucking delightful! Not only a wonderful parody, but gets me right where I love exotic infectious diseases. plagues make me feel all funny inside. I will send a bevy of charming unifected strippers to your home in thanks.10
oh dear gawd no! The illiterate twerp is trying to really uncreatively insult me! Whatever shall I do? Look Chuckles, 'm better at this than you, so don't try. I've seen many a teenybopper flamer like yourself attempt to out-heckle me and they all failed. In short, your kung fu is nothing compared to mine, so give up. Get a hobby, go outside and play, jerk off to avril lavigne, just wait until you're a little older and better armed before you get into verbal sparring matches. Hugs 'n' kisses!
I doubt you could. too small and covered in small pimples. Cornhusker.
That's a pretty sad try at a heckle, fartknocker. You're just all bitchy because I called you on some utterly crap poemes. You are indeed simple. Tell me, do use know how to use periods to end sentences, or do you always use "hahaha"? If the latter, I'm sure you're great at eulogies. How exactly is it not a poem? a series of haiku stanzas detailing a narrative, as a modification of a traditional form. That said, go squeeze your pimples and try again when you're older and have maybe grown some balls.
Oh, tragedy! I have been found out as a mere commoner by some shitstain who couldn't punctuate a sentence to save his life. All is lost. Suicide again for me.
All I can say is... strange. It does have a certain something to it.
Nah, it's funny. soap droppage=comedy gold.
awesome, awesome, awesome. talent you hold with the greatest regards. dr.
What are you talking about. Fuck the audience. You right the poem for yourself. If anyone else likes them who fucking cares.
Grin
Derge
Its me!!! As my friends will attest to.
Ok bro, I'll try not to steer you wrong.
S-1 line 2 is unnecessary, see line 1.
(would) I be enlightened.
S-2 lines 5/6 repeat 3/4
LIne 8 work into the last stanza
lines 10 and 12 could merge, lose line 11
S-3 you could use "spitfires" to exclaim his response.
the other plane is missing an (r)
(I preferred Stukas, myself)
drop the (but(s)
A river waiting for a mudslide makes no sense (to me)
and I'm unsure about the russian doll(my naivete prob.)
Any way, hope that helps. Oh,also, All the thoughts are there, but they could stand some organizing.
Best I can do for a piece so powerful. b.o.l.
Rich
Great concept and very good poem (9); but, present yourself in the best light and spell it right, MP.
I am, and pissed that the librarian bitches have cunningly blocked poemranker in the ILC and claim its 'connection speed'
Now that I know a little more, this smokes!!!!!
Nice, cant pick any faults
Maybe a bit short
I think a killer line might make this poem,
I hope you find one