replying on Silent Night by Dovina
29 Nov 2005, 3:52 AM
Dark Angel can't die he's too clever for that.
on Silent Night by Dovina
29 Nov 2005, 3:51 AM
If his piece was so heavenly would your night be so silent>?
replying on Letter from Palermo by Caducus
24 Nov 2005, 5:10 AM
It all makes sense what you say. Its hard to see what needs to change and others see it but seldom say it in a way that is clear.
I need to change without changing the good points.
Let me know with any future postings if you can.
I think I have the ideas and some are too big for my limited ability - I am not saying their i am crap but maybe my ideas are too vast for my talents.
Thats the gut reaction from your comment.
I need to change without changing the good points.
Let me know with any future postings if you can.
I think I have the ideas and some are too big for my limited ability - I am not saying their i am crap but maybe my ideas are too vast for my talents.
Thats the gut reaction from your comment.
replying on Night song of Pattaya by Caducus
22 Nov 2005, 2:18 AM
Well thanks for pushing me to raise the bar higher and you're dead right about the mass produced mercandise angle 'made in pattaya for 10 dollars' that kind of thing but harder and more concise.
Your comment has made me understand you so much more.
Its funny how you pick up on the whole art/painting thing - i was going to call these kids hitlers art as he was a struggling artist (and crap) but just couldnt find the angle.
I'm gonna rewrite another version of this for you zodiac.
Your comment has made me understand you so much more.
Its funny how you pick up on the whole art/painting thing - i was going to call these kids hitlers art as he was a struggling artist (and crap) but just couldnt find the angle.
I'm gonna rewrite another version of this for you zodiac.
on Night song of Pattaya by Caducus
21 Nov 2005, 9:19 AM
Grey as kerbs - grey upon grey, plinths for statues frozen in time commemorating nothing but filth.
replying on Night song of Pattaya by Caducus
21 Nov 2005, 9:17 AM
Your're there.
Child prostitution and the occasional murder and cover up. Noone their cares though so covering up the invisible is ironic.
As usual I'm in a happy mood lol.
Child prostitution and the occasional murder and cover up. Noone their cares though so covering up the invisible is ironic.
As usual I'm in a happy mood lol.
replying on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus
15 Nov 2005, 1:25 AM
I know I'm flawed I just do the best from what I got.
on I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya
10 Nov 2005, 3:13 AM
We're all whores at some point in our lives.
Poets are the worst kind, we like to parade our words hoping others buy what we say.
Poets are the worst kind, we like to parade our words hoping others buy what we say.
on phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya
10 Nov 2005, 3:11 AM
Indulgent. The opening line works but I'm left thinking if their is more beyond the surface to this or if its my overactive mind.
Last stanza drop stirs up the leaves (you dont need THE)
Otherwise quite solid.
Last stanza drop stirs up the leaves (you dont need THE)
Otherwise quite solid.
on The Embrowning by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
8 Nov 2005, 6:55 AM
bowel moving
on "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
8 Nov 2005, 6:54 AM
Edward Longshanks once said of the scottish cad william wallace
"A man does himself good business when he rids himself of a turd"
Vintage.
Love the bit about the coward and a brush. What is the inspiration behind your poemes of poo?
"A man does himself good business when he rids himself of a turd"
Vintage.
Love the bit about the coward and a brush. What is the inspiration behind your poemes of poo?
on Farm animals by INTRANSIT
8 Nov 2005, 6:47 AM
Check you out with your gift of ghazal sheesh this i sgood - love the image on the butcher.
on To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy
8 Nov 2005, 5:08 AM
I got some ideas from this - inspiring and bar raising.
on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
8 Nov 2005, 5:06 AM
Credit where its due this is the best I've seen from you and deserves comments.
I see a lot of control in this and the language form is a detraction from your usual style.
In a word - graceful.
I see a lot of control in this and the language form is a detraction from your usual style.
In a word - graceful.
on The nymph steals the farm-son by <~>
20 Oct 2005, 9:23 AM
I want lines 5 and 8 - lathe wonderful use of it too.
on My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit
18 Oct 2005, 5:57 AM
Looking back on my earlier stuff I agree it sucked ass.
The occasional line / stanza was okay but I cringe looking back at some of it.
My error was to post stuff in no apparent order, for instance I would post a poem i wrote at 20 and then the same day one I just wrote at 27 and its no wonder you thought 'what the fuck'?
I realized this error and birthed the swine - now I hope some of my later ones (the last 30 or so) are passable.
I was an arrogant cunt and apologize.
The occasional line / stanza was okay but I cringe looking back at some of it.
My error was to post stuff in no apparent order, for instance I would post a poem i wrote at 20 and then the same day one I just wrote at 27 and its no wonder you thought 'what the fuck'?
I realized this error and birthed the swine - now I hope some of my later ones (the last 30 or so) are passable.
I was an arrogant cunt and apologize.
Glad too.
The author of ten nibs are her fingers stroking me through making love. Writing/Carving a memory which scarred.
This poem is a typical example of locking the door while you write so you are not interrupted. Flawed because of it but thanks for the negs and positve comments -one i wil have to revisit.
The author of ten nibs are her fingers stroking me through making love. Writing/Carving a memory which scarred.
This poem is a typical example of locking the door while you write so you are not interrupted. Flawed because of it but thanks for the negs and positve comments -one i wil have to revisit.