nice jop. I like this.

it should be "you're" a contraction for "you are" not "your" which is a possessive pronoun.
after that, try some more substance, more specific details, images, etc.
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I was. thanks for spoiling it. the ambiguity has ruined the excitement. one word for you:
STOLID. look it up.

weak. it is screaming "teenager" and is so full of extra words and so lacking in images, freshness, or poetry.

It reminds me of an eminem song, only without the line breaks.

3rd line's a bit lacking. you had the opportunity for some punch, but you slightly missed it (not to mention syllables)

The line that captivated me was "with you, you dont know jack". It's just so pure.

Rather weak and stolid.

what is "unbareab"?
cliche:"like a gunshot"

A lovely poem about a middle aged man with scissors. is it modeled after Boo Radley from To Kill a Mockingbird?

A nice father's day poem. however, not a haiku. you have about 195 too many syllables.

I don't get the title.

Yu should almost never use the word "just". it is seldom necessary and it musddies up meaning bu softening the impact of your verb. perhaps "to" would be an apt replacement.

sing-song

haven't

truth. Love it. 10